.....? \"tears of a dreamer"(dreams)

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anonymous albert ?

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0 posted 2001-05-01 03:03 PM

first of all in my before post
i thought people got too much pressure from me wantin' a in depth reply...
but those who gave thier precious time to reply "in depth"i would like to give my sincere
and all that was in this poem never was dreamed but..imagined..

also i wrote this kind of poem to discover something else.."my imagination"..i guess..cause everybody seem to say i wrote "real" poems so yea..hope you guys like it..and enjoy the true meaning behind this poem..cya

i spread my wings to fly , into the skies above
where i’ve found , my true friend in freedom of love

as the skies are like blue water , with a light that shines through
which i’m lost in this ecstacy , forever in tranquility to view

as the images i see , are beautiful paintings so vivid to be
but i can’t explain it in words , so just imagine with me

lets journey through this path , hoping it’ll never end
cause all the time will be left in memories , treasures of our times in love my friend

then in my thoughts , lies the emotions that only matters
as i miss , those skies of blue waters

but i’m only to acknowledge the place in my dreams , leaving me with my fears
that shows nothing but an imagination , of this wish in endless tears...

[and the "friend" is me within]

apr.30

but i really jus wanted to share wit more people...
much thanks to..Dopey_Dope , Low Man's Lyric and banburycross...appreciation..
sorry i posted this in a repost..

if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry"

[This message has been edited by anonymous albert ? (edited 05-03-2001).]

LoveBug

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1 posted 2001-05-01 05:59 PM

"as the images i see , are beautiful paintings so vivid to be
but i can’t explain it in words , so just imagine with me"

This is a beautiful piece. I really love how you describe your dreams in this one. Although we must leave them, as you say in the last lines, you capture the memories so well that it's like you haven't woke up yet. Thanks for sharing.

"Men judge generally more by the eye than by the hand, for everyone can see and few can feel."-Machiavelli
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lonely*soul
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east haddam (moodus) ct :)

2 posted 2001-05-01 08:41 PM

too bad we wake up...isnt it??? but i love the descroptions and such..awsome job
*KiM*

Dopey Dope

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3 posted 2001-05-01 10:30 PM

You know what I think....and even though I got it wrong (which made me mad hehe) i liked it.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

chas
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4 posted 2001-05-01 10:33 PM

Humm……..chocolate

Child of the Stars

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5 posted 2001-05-02 07:19 AM

Definitely, chas. Quark...this was truly great....very deep indeed....I'm gonna have to re-read it a few more times to get the whole effect....

~Carly

"Your joy is your sorrow unmasked. And the self-same well from which your laughter rises was often-times filled with your tears." ~Kahil Gibran

Ina
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6 posted 2001-05-02 01:38 PM

This was great! Amazing stuff. Powerful imagery and hit hard impact..... The poem was very good

*two thumbs up*

Regina

"Take a look at my face, there's no price I won't pay
To say these words to you"bon jovi

banburycross
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since 2001-03-27

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viginia

7 posted 2001-05-03 09:13 AM

i still really like this, so i'm going to reply to the repost too

you did a great job on this, always like reading your work.

Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing.

Fading Away

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8 posted 2001-05-03 01:55 PM

This was very nicely done! My favorite lines were: "lets journey through this path , hoping it’ll never end
cause all the time will be left in memories , treasures of our times in love my friend"
Beautiful!
I have one suggestion.. you might want to think about making the poem into stanzas with 4 line in each stanza. That might help the flow a little. Other than that, the imagery in this piece was excellent, and powerful. I enjoyed this. Nice work!

--Marie

Don't ever be someone's slogan, because you are poetry.

Low Man's Lyric
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In a dream

9 posted 2001-05-03 04:23 PM

I don't mind replying again to a good poem like yours even if it is a repost. Good job with this poem and hope to read more from ya.

Give her two red roses, each with a note. The first note says "For the woman I love" and the second, "For my best friend."
~Anonymous

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