tears of missing you (dedicated to someone special)

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banburycross
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since 2001-03-27

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viginia

0 posted 2001-04-30 10:08 PM

Trees whirl by my window,
blurred by hurried passage
over too many lonely miles.

Held by silent tears,
threatening the corners of my eyes.

I lose myself in miles
that i strive to keep from passing.

Your taste still graces my lips,
lingering to torture my senses.
The memory of your gentil touch,
still sets my blood on fire.

But your fingers are long absent,
yearning pulls the strands of my soul.

There is only the window,
the green blur of the trees,
and the steady ache of my heart.

My eyes are finally overwhelmed,
and i give in to the tears,
and the salty taste of emptiness.

Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing.

anonymous albert ?

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since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

1 posted 2001-04-30 10:46 PM

this was a very well...written poem..
so much emotions in here..
i hope you feel better....things will turn out the best for you in the long run..
and great poem , keep writing

...?

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Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

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San Juan, Puerto Rico

2 posted 2001-04-30 11:18 PM

Wow this is so sad. I love how you said that emptiness tastes like salt....obviously due to the tears. Anyhow, I just loved that.
Well done!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

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I admire it daily

banburycross
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since 2001-03-27

Posts 946
viginia

3 posted 2001-04-30 11:39 PM

thanks for the replies you guys, they mean a lot to me. by the way, for anyone else who reads this, this poem is dedicated to marie, who is coming home tonight and who i still miss very much. so things will get better albert because i'll get to see her soon

things are always better when they have a happy ending

Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing.

Child of the Stars

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since 2000-09-07

Posts 1658
Ann Arbor, MI

4 posted 2001-05-01 07:19 AM

Ohhh giving into the tears...that was kickin...very sad...Well I hope you get to see her again soon and everything is peachy...I miss Marie too!!

Ok, no crying, it's illegal. Only smiles!!!

~Carly

"Your joy is your sorrow unmasked. And the self-same well from which your laughter rises was often-times filled with your tears." ~Kahil Gibran

Fading Away

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since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

5 posted 2001-05-01 11:44 AM

This was beautiful babe. You know I loved it.
I'm home now

Yay! Home is where the heart is

I missed everyone too! Especially you, love. *kiss*
Very well written poem.. As always, it touched me.

--Marie

subconsciously, i think i can eat so much to make my stomach hurt, instead of my heart.

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

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Twilight Zone

6 posted 2001-05-09 01:47 PM

What a beautiful read this is. I'm so amazed by your choices of words. Thanks for sharing and keep it up

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So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

Tangerines
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since 2001-05-07

Posts 22
Richmond, Virginia

7 posted 2001-05-09 02:59 PM

Okay, okay, I'm replying. I like this - the first line is a very striking image. Run a spell check, dear. And don't forget: you don't need commas at the end of every line! But I like muchly. Lots of emotion.

Don't yell at me. You asked for it.

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artemis_selene
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since 2001-05-07

Posts 14
virginia

8 posted 2001-05-09 04:25 PM

i surely can identify with the "emptiness"! this was really prolific; it seemed like you delved deep with this one. the flow was kinda awkward, but other than that, i enjoyed it.

vixengrl04
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since 2001-04-26

Posts 495
East Haddam, CT

9 posted 2001-05-09 05:51 PM

Awww this was such a sweetly written poem. Excellent work!

~*Nikki*~

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Lakewalker
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since 2000-08-05

Posts 3289
On the streets w/ people

10 posted 2001-05-09 06:06 PM

Great job on this poem, the words are so well written.

"Be kind for everyone you meet is fighting a harder battle" Plato.

Suga_Baby
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since 2000-08-06

Posts 380
Maine, USA

11 posted 2001-05-09 08:59 PM

This was very sad but beautiful

nice work!

,
Suga

"A dream is a wish your heart makes while you are fast asleep."

~*brittt*~
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since 2001-05-09

Posts 76
East Haddam, CT

12 posted 2001-05-16 12:48 PM

This poem was soooo good.I really really liked it alot. It was really sad, and I hope things get better soon!
~britt~

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keoni
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since 2000-10-16

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Up in the mountains in the NFC

13 posted 2001-05-16 01:42 PM

Man this is good. The last line topped it for me. It's going in my library. Great job.

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Marshalzu

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since 2001-02-15

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14 posted 2001-05-16 02:15 PM

Great work Banbury this was another excellent piece from you well done

Marshal Zu

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