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tears of missing you (dedicated to someone special)
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banburycross Senior Member
since 2001-03-27
Posts 946viginia |
Trees whirl by my window, blurred by hurried passage over too many lonely miles. Held by silent tears, threatening the corners of my eyes. I lose myself in miles that i strive to keep from passing. Your taste still graces my lips, lingering to torture my senses. The memory of your gentil touch, still sets my blood on fire. But your fingers are long absent, yearning pulls the strands of my soul. There is only the window, the green blur of the trees, and the steady ache of my heart. My eyes are finally overwhelmed, and i give in to the tears, and the salty taste of emptiness. Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing. |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
this was a very well...written poem.. so much emotions in here.. i hope you feel better....things will turn out the best for you in the long run.. and great poem , keep writing   ...?if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry" |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Wow this is so sad. I love how you said that emptiness tastes like salt....obviously due to the tears. Anyhow, I just loved that. Well done!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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banburycross Senior Member
since 2001-03-27
Posts 946viginia |
thanks for the replies you guys, they mean a lot to me. by the way, for anyone else who reads this, this poem is dedicated to marie, who is coming home tonight and who i still miss very much. so things will get better albert because i'll get to see her soon  things are always better when they have a happy ending Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing. |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Ohhh giving into the tears...that was kickin...very sad...Well I hope you get to see her again soon and everything is peachy...I miss Marie too!!  Ok, no crying, it's illegal. Only smiles!!! ~Carly "Your joy is your sorrow unmasked. And the self-same well from which your laughter rises was often-times filled with your tears." ~Kahil Gibran |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
This was beautiful babe. You know I loved it. I'm home now Yay! Home is where the heart is  I missed everyone too! Especially you, love. *kiss* Very well written poem.. As always, it touched me. --Marie subconsciously, i think i can eat so much to make my stomach hurt, instead of my heart. |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
What a beautiful read this is. I'm so amazed by your choices of words. Thanks for sharing and keep it up "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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Tangerines Junior Member
since 2001-05-07
Posts 22Richmond, Virginia |
Okay, okay, I'm replying. I like this - the first line is a very striking image. Run a spell check, dear. And don't forget: you don't need commas at the end of every line! But I like muchly. Lots of emotion. Don't yell at me. You asked for it. "I don't judge people, I just watch them till it's time to look away. I wanna look away now." - Kristin Hersh |
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artemis_selene Junior Member
since 2001-05-07
Posts 14virginia |
i surely can identify with the "emptiness"! this was really prolific; it seemed like you delved deep with this one. the flow was kinda awkward, but other than that, i enjoyed it. |
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vixengrl04 Member
since 2001-04-26
Posts 495East Haddam, CT |
Awww this was such a sweetly written poem. Excellent work! ~*Nikki*~ ~*Of all the millions of people in the world, I'm just me.*~ |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Great job on this poem, the words are so well written. "Be kind for everyone you meet is fighting a harder battle" Plato. |
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Suga_Baby Member
since 2000-08-06
Posts 380Maine, USA |
This was very sad but beautiful nice work! ,Suga "A dream is a wish your heart makes while you are fast asleep." |
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~*brittt*~ Member
since 2001-05-09
Posts 76East Haddam, CT |
This poem was soooo good.I really really liked it alot. It was really sad, and I hope things get better soon! ~britt~ If you live to be 100 years old, I want to live to be 101 so I never have to live a day without you. |
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keoni Senior Member
since 2000-10-16
Posts 850Up in the mountains in the NFC |
Man this is good. The last line topped it for me. It's going in my library. Great job. "Your anger is a gift"-Rage Against The Machine |
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Marshalzu 
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
Great work Banbury this was another excellent piece from you well done Marshal Zu " The tree of liberty must be refreshed from time to time with the blood of patriots" -Thomas jefferson |
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