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broken wing
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0 posted 2001-04-30 09:00 PM


i held it all in
i let it build up
i threw it all at you
for no reason at all

i hurt your feelings
i did you wrong
i wasnt a good friend
im sorry


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Jenn Cirrincione
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1 posted 2001-04-30 09:10 PM


Wow... short but powerful... I've been on both sides of this one. Keep 'em coming!

Jenn

"I've come too close to happiness, to have it swept away,don't think I can take the pain, never fall again..." Janet

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2 posted 2001-04-30 11:24 PM


It's ok.....stuff happens. You will be forgiven. Just learn from it  
Good poem!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Fading Away
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3 posted 2001-05-01 02:19 PM


I like this!  It's short, but very well written.  Nice work, I hope to see more.

--Marie

subconsciously, i think i can eat so much to make my stomach hurt, instead of my heart.

Allan Riverwood
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4 posted 2001-05-02 10:47 PM


Nice work.  Very short and to the point.
Hope you were forgiven.
~Allan

Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day.  Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life.  
~Unknown

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viginia
5 posted 2001-05-03 12:53 PM


this is a great write, you packed as much feeling and power into eight lines as i think you could have.  great job on this piece, i look forward to more of your work.

Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing.

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