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Godsend_1 Member
since 2001-04-19
Posts 247great state of illinois |
i sit here wondering wondering why i am here here to do your bidding bidding for my life why cant you be here with me me the one you say you love love, the greatest emotion you can feel feel the way i feel for you i wonder why the dove does scream scream into the forbidding night night, a place of eternal darkness darkness is what i am filled with why cant my life be easy easier then this fight fighting for the love of you you the most perfect girl i know i wonder why the dove does scream scream into the shadows shadows of utter horror horror of my soul i am what i am and that is all that i am and all that i shall ever be......so deal with it |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
this is really very good  |
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vixengrl04 Member
since 2001-04-26
Posts 495East Haddam, CT |
"I wonder why the dove does scream?" I really like that. This was very well written and good job! ~*Nikki*~ ~*Of all the millions of people in the world, I'm just me.*~ |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Whoa, a bit twisted...an airy tone to it at times, and at others pure horror....interesting, very interesting... ~Carly "Your joy is your sorrow unmasked. And the self-same well from which your laughter rises was often-times filled with your tears." ~Kahil Gibran |
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MoeRocko Member
since 2001-04-25
Posts 166West Virginia |
Pretty cool. Starts out kinda peaceful then goes dramatic then back down. lol Kinda like a poetic rollercoaster.... Good one  Don't turn your back on the future, you have nothing to look back on..... |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
i also liked this part of the poem "I wonder why the dove does scream?" nice job on the poem.. keep writing   ...?if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry" |
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AngelPoet87 Member
since 2001-04-21
Posts 280Indy |
Great job, Ben!! I really like this one, its a good piece. Keep your chin up and smile. Take care always, talk to ya soon. ~ali 2Good |
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Isabel Galaxia Senior Member
since 2000-06-18
Posts 733 |
Hey- wow that was great! I think this is the first thing I've read from you...but I'll be sure to keep checking. ¡Good job!  Bel |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Yes, very twisted as everyone said. I love it loads, it was a dark, outsider view on something known as a sign of beauty. Insightful. I like it. ~Allan Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life. |
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branden726
since 2000-09-25
Posts 607Bay City, MI |
hey, i liked this one a lil twisted yeah but good. *Tears of love* |
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branden726
since 2000-09-25
Posts 607Bay City, MI |
hey, i liked this one a lil twisted yeah but good. *Tears of love* |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Quite enjoyable! Looking forward to more. Quiero mas! Ahora! AHORA MISMO!!!!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Very nice work! I liked this quite a lot. Nicely done --Marie subconsciously, i think i can eat so much to make my stomach hurt, instead of my heart. |
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