summer when i was a kid-O - pipTalk Forums

How to Join	Member's Area	Private Library	Search	Sanctuary		Login
Main Forums	Discussion	Tech Talk	Mature Content	Archives	A home without a wall, Our haven without ends, A circle we all call Our Family of Friends!

Teen Poetry #4

summer when i was a kid-O

knightlyshadows
Senior Member

since 2001-04-14

Posts 791
obscured vision

0 posted 2001-04-29 02:08 AM

im standing in a creek bed
pants rolled up to my knees
winds tangling up my hair
water running over my feet

im looking up at the sun
seeing nothing but light spots
feeling the warmth on my face
and the coolness on my feet

“A single choice can build destinies,or destroy them.”

"at the touch of love anyone becomes a poet"

Low Man's Lyric
Member

since 2001-04-03

Posts 236
In a dream

1 posted 2001-04-29 02:18 AM

I miss being a kid. Good poem, it brought back some old memories.

Give her two red roses, each with a note. The first note says "For the woman I love" and the second, "For my best friend."
~Anonymous

Allan Riverwood

Member Elite

since 2001-01-04

Posts 3502
Winnipeg

2 posted 2001-04-29 03:03 AM

I don't miss being a kid... I'd eat anything...

Wonderful job. I like how the ending sort of trails off... it seems like this was the kind of poem you'd write for a while and then just realize it is done. I have a few of those.
~Allan

Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life.
~Unknown

Dopey Dope

Moderator

Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

3 posted 2001-04-29 06:01 PM

Very serene mood to this one. It relaxed me.
*sigh*.....

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Allan Riverwood

Member Elite

since 2001-01-04

Posts 3502
Winnipeg

4 posted 2001-04-30 12:21 PM

*hands Javier a glass of water*

SEA

Moderator

Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

5 posted 2001-04-30 11:48 AM

Tiffy girl

I must still be a kid-o then!

I liked this very much! every summer, we go to a creek out in the woods, close to our house and swim and play in the water....I can't wait till we go this year

thanks for reminding me it's almost time

SEA

Acies

Moderator

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

6 posted 2001-05-09 12:20 PM

Very serene and beautiful read
you did excellent
I love it
keep sharing

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

	⇧ top of page ⇧
All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format.