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knightlyshadows
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0 posted 2001-04-29 01:53 AM


i see her there
sitting all alone
shes looking out before her
but she doesnt see what i see
shes lost in her own thoughts
not seeing what i see
looking out before her
sitting all alone
i see her there

“A single choice can build destinies,or destroy them.”

"at the touch of love anyone becomes a poet"

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1 posted 2001-04-29 01:56 AM


Just wondering, are you talking about yourself in tehis poem?  Well, it was a great one.  Keep it up!

*~*Amanda*~*

My tears roll right down my cheeks, but they all soak into my pillow.  I feel kinda sorry for it...

knightlyshadows
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2 posted 2001-04-29 02:01 AM


no its not about me.

“A single choice can build destinies,or destroy them.”

"at the touch of love anyone becomes a poet"

Allan Riverwood
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3 posted 2001-04-29 03:00 AM


Nice... well organized, the format is interesting.  Reminded me of cinquain, in a way.  But better, way way better (*doesn't like cinquain*   hehe)  
Good job.
~Allan

Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day.  Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life.  
~Unknown

knightlyshadows
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4 posted 2001-04-29 03:02 AM


lol@allan *found out wut a cinquain was* lol:P
thanx for the replys guys much appreciated
tiff


“A single choice can build destinies,or destroy them.”

"at the touch of love anyone becomes a poet"

[This message has been edited by knightlyshadows (edited 04-29-2001).]

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5 posted 2001-04-29 05:56 PM


This was great. I really enjoyed this poem.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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