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Almost why I haven't been posting |
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Elvenblood Member
since 2001-02-17
Posts 409Maine, USA 
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For anyone who cares, very word of this is true. ...I just don't know how to explain it, but this is why I haven't been writing. Words fly endless inside my head No start no end, they don’t fit Can’t string them together in a thread I can’t express myself, I want to quit In love and death, I cannot feel The love of my life, can’t make me reel To anyone and all I must conceal Because it’s far too painful to reveal After all that will and has transpired I feel sorrowful, and deathly tired No words, no LIFE nor ideas acquired No matter what the life, I’m not inspired Now I live with hallow eyes I grasp at other people’s cries The meaning of this great demise Is too much, I never said my good-byes I cannot write what I want to tell Emotions are gone, without farewell Inspired only, by my own personal hell Now I sit an empty shell Staring vacantly ahead I haven’t landed now that I’ve fell My soul is dead No angels in heaven nor demons below the sea, could ever dissever my soul from the soul of the beautiful Annabel Lee [This message has been edited by Elvenblood (edited 04-28-2001).] |
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~sugarpie313~ Member
since 2000-09-14
Posts 375Maine, USA |
This is really good and i understand where your coming from because I too have been there LOL. The stanza "I cannot write what I want to tell Emotions are gone, without farewell Inspired only, by my own personal hell" really stand out to me... it relates to me so well *L* but hey good job! i hope that you can write some more cuz i really do love your work! ttyl Valerie [This message has been edited by ~sugarpie313~ (edited 04-28-2001).] |
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branden726 
since 2000-09-25
Posts 607Bay City, MI |
Very good, i like this one and thanks for writting....This really made me think a lot good job |
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Suga_Baby Member
since 2000-08-06
Posts 380Maine, USA |
Oh, boy, boy... I HATE it when you have so many thoughts burning inside you but you can't find the words to let them out... glad you have posted again, you're AWESOME!!  -Sara- "A dream is a wish your heart makes while you are fast asleep." |
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Heavens Tears
since 2001-03-15
Posts 677 |
Do you know how many unfinished poem I have, where I wrote half, and couldnt figure out how to say the rest. Maybe one day, Ill string them all together and make a "poem". LOL. Great poem though, I guess your writers block is over. *~*Amanda*~* |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
I completely get what you're saying here, Bryan. I just got over a major dose of writer's block myself. It's great to see you back! Oh and I liked the rhyme scheme!  ~Allan Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life. |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
This was a great poem. I do hope all works out for you in the end. Regina "Take a look at my face, there's no price I won't pay |
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Elvenblood Member
since 2001-02-17
Posts 409Maine, USA |
Well, its not just writer's block, it's deeper than that. Also, I don't take pride in anything, I don't find joy in anything, I don't find sadness in anything. The only emotion I feel is anger when I'm feeling anything. And I have words, words come to me as clearly as any other time, but....I just can't write about something. Not poetry. I don't know, I'm sure it'll work out in the end, but thanks for the replies! Oh! And I will be posting more within a coule days :-) No angels in heaven nor demons below the sea, could ever dissever my soul from the soul of the beautiful Annabel Lee |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
ey..i liked this poem it is something i sometimes relate 2..and i think ur fire is dimming right now... no worries it'll soon blaze if u know what i'm sayin..so jus keep writing..   ...?death is not the greatest loss in life. the greatest loss is what dies inside us while we live. -norman cousins |
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JBaker515
since 2001-02-28
Posts 458Dartmouth College |
We have all been through it, or at least i know i have..just work through it...good poem too! |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Elven......I went through a full year of being a cold hearted guy. No feelings. I couldn't care about anything or anyone and it was horrible. I enjoyed the poem though and I hope all goes well.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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