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knightlyshadows Senior Member
since 2001-04-14
Posts 791obscured vision |
he told me tonight the horrible news to make it right i have to lose not fast enough not soon enough cant stop, too fast cant care, too soon is this fake? is it too late? is this a mistake? i'll just have to wait moving too fast moving too soon too fast to stop too soon to care “A single choice can build destinies,or destroy them.” |
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knightlyshadows Senior Member
since 2001-04-14
Posts 791obscured vision |
ok this will make no sense to yall so sorry but it does make sense if u know the situations :d tiff  “A single choice can build destinies,or destroy them.” |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
I think I got the gist of it... good job on the poem, it had a great flow.  Hope to see more of yours. ~Allan Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life. |
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Godsend_1 Member
since 2001-04-19
Posts 247great state of illinois |
i love you baby you have a talent that makes mine seem small keep up the great work i love you *kisses tiffany* ben redshaw the great and deeply in love i am what i am and that is all that i am and all that i shall ever be......so deal with it |
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dreamy_eyes Member
since 2000-06-17
Posts 67 |
A reat poem. Regular rhythum and rhyme all the way through. I dig it! Luv Debi xXx  Life is like a box of chocolates...you know there's something good inside but by the time you remove the wrapping, it's gone all soft and squidgey! |
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Suga_Baby Member
since 2000-08-06
Posts 380Maine, USA |
You're right, I am lost... but I still like!! Very well done "A dream is a wish your heart makes while you are fast asleep." |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
It was ok....not my fav. I enjoy your short poems a bit more....just my personal preference....to each his own, eh? Anyhow, you did do well on this one.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Yup, I'm lost too, but your writing shows me that you have a lot of talent. Loving your writing style. keep it up "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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