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Life Chills |
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fozzyozzy Member
since 2001-03-15
Posts 336Lessburg Virginia 
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Life Chills Wind drifts through Dead gray grass Unable to feel Its billowing arms Pushing through the field Do you, dead leaves Wish to feel again Countless repetitions Dying again And trees to blossom Only to fall off Chill to the soul Dry dead grass What good is it Wind may be a kiss But it is too cold for me "The heart can think of no devotion |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
I really like the last two lines. I think they'll probably go down in history...  ~Allan Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life. |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
wow.....this is great  |
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katherine Member
since 2000-06-10
Posts 365Canberra Australia |
awesome ~kate if you don't let them in they can't see the real you |
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vixengrl04 Member
since 2001-04-26
Posts 495East Haddam, CT |
Wind may be a kiss But it is too cold for me These last two lines said it all. I really like the way it ended. Good job here. ~*Nikki*~ ~*Of all the millions of people in the world, I'm just me.*~ |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
i liked the poem overall.. but the last lines were awesome.. keep writing   ...?death is not the greatest loss in life. the greatest loss is what dies inside us while we live. -norman cousins |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Well done. Yea the last two lines rocked. I enjoyed the poem.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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