Teen Poetry #4 |
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i dont really know for some reason "tears of solid joy' keeps coming up |
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Godsend_1 Member
since 2001-04-19
Posts 247great state of illinois |
You tell me you got hurt I weep You tell me someone was mean I weep You tell me that they said bad things About the woman I love And I weep I tell you it will be alright You weep I tell you I will get the people that hurt you You weep I tell you I will make them pay For hurting the woman I love And you weep We know we will be alright We weep We know that other people are just jealous We weep And we no longer care what they say About out great love And we weep We weep for joy i am what i am and that is all that i am and all that i shall ever be......so deal with it |
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knightlyshadows Senior Member
since 2001-04-14
Posts 791obscured vision |
*hugs* i like this alot i think its great ben! i love you tiff ![]() “A single choice can build destinies,or destroy them.” |
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anonymous albert ?![]()
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
interestin.. not many write bout tears of joy anyway...good job on the poem and keep writing ![]() ![]() death is not the greatest loss in life. the greatest loss is what dies inside us while we live. -norman cousins |
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I think weep is a funny word. Weep weep weep weep weep weep weep weep weep weep weep weep wepp weep weep weep weep weep Weep weep weep weep weep weep weep weep weep weep weep weep wepp weep weep weep weep weep Weep weep weep weep weep weep weep weep weep weep weep weep wepp weep weep weep weep weep Great poem. I enjoyed it! ![]() I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Allan Riverwood![]() ![]()
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
*covers his ears* Stop it Javier... ![]() Good poem man, I liked the format! ![]() ~Allan Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life. |
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AngelPoet87 Member
since 2001-04-21
Posts 280Indy |
Aww, this was so sweet. I really do think you did a wonderful job here. Great format, too. Believe in yourself, chin up always. Lots of luv, ttyl ~ali 2Good |
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
That was a good read. You did well my friend. it's nice to have someone do things with you ![]() "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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Pixie-Babe03 Member
since 2000-08-29
Posts 387Central Maine |
this is great ![]() *Justine* -=Love starts with a SMILE, grows with a KISS, and ends with a TEAR=- |
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lonely*soul Member
since 2001-04-05
Posts 396east haddam (moodus) ct :) |
i like the way you wrote this one...i...you...we. hehe good job. i liked this one! *KiMMiE* |
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