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Suga_Baby
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since 2000-08-06

Posts 380
Maine, USA

0 posted 2001-04-25 05:42 PM

I give and I give
Until I break
I hate to give in
With so much at stake

Trying so hard (not too hard)
To be the very best
The greatest girl to you
More special than the rest

Yet despite my caution
And the heed I took
You left like the others
Didn’t take another look

Maybe next time luck
Will be on my side
But until it appears
My heart I shall hide

"A dream is a wish your heart makes while you are fast asleep."

anonymous albert ?

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since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

1 posted 2001-04-25 05:46 PM

nice job on this..
i liked it.
its a harsh truth and when it happens its really painful esp when its a person u love
thanks for sharing
keep writing

...?

death is not the greatest loss in life. the greatest loss is what dies inside us while we live. -norman cousins

Chel
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since 2000-07-01

Posts 511
Baltimore, MD, USA

2 posted 2001-04-25 06:20 PM

Nice piece of work. Keep up the great work, and I hope to read more.

Chel

"True friends stab you in the front."
"You are special and unique in your own way." "Always remember compliments you received; forget about the rude

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

3 posted 2001-04-25 06:21 PM

If you hide it completely the luck won't find it either....be open...but not too open. I liked the poem....

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Allan Riverwood

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since 2001-01-04

Posts 3502
Winnipeg

4 posted 2001-04-25 06:23 PM

Nice job... I did enjoy it quite a bit.

Good format.
~Allan

Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life.
~Unknown

Fading Away

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since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

5 posted 2001-04-26 08:27 PM

This was very good! I enjoyed it. Nice work!

--Marie

subconsciously, i think i can eat so much to make my stomach hurt, instead of my heart.

SEA

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Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

6 posted 2001-04-26 08:45 PM

you did this very well

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

7 posted 2001-04-26 10:58 PM

Oh Sara, I'm sorry you still feel this way. If there is only a way for me to make you feel better. Keep writing though, it help release the sadness in our hearts. thanks for sharing a very heart felt poem

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

Ina
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since 2000-10-09

Posts 1236
Quebec, Canada

8 posted 2001-04-26 11:20 PM

I agree with dopey..hes always right...lol

this was a great poem. nice format good impact!

Regina

"If you told me to cry for you, I could
If you told me to die for you, I would
Take a look at my face, there's no price I won't pay
To say these wo

vixengrl04
Member

since 2001-04-26

Posts 495
East Haddam, CT

9 posted 2001-04-27 10:40 AM

This is very, very good. It's quite sad though. Sounds like the kind of thing I would write. Let me tell you, despite how much I try with EVERYTHING I do, my efforts never amount to anything at all. And that really is a sucky feeling, huh? I'm sorry for your situation and wish you the best of luck.

~*Nikki*~

~*Of all the millions of people in the world, I'm just me.*~

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