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chic Member
since 2000-01-26
Posts 245yellville, Ar, U.S. |
I know I ain't been around, but you know how hectic life gets. Anyway how is this for an entrance? As the sun goes down over the waters edge. I watch the ripples as they spread across the lake. The sky has darkened and the stars shine brightly. I sit here alone...thinking, but I am not alone for your memory lingers. Floating through the breeze your scent fills me whole. The vision of your smile lights up my soul. I see your face at the waters edge. I reach to touch you my heart filled with joy. As I touch your face it disappears. My heart is saddened it was just a REFLECTION. "Life is a game and we have to play, but in the end...we all die."-by me! |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
trust me i knoe how life is... anyways tho..nice job on the poem.. keep writing   ...?death is not the greatest loss in life. the greatest loss is what dies inside us while we live. -norman cousins |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Hey I liked this.....very well done. Sad that it was only a reflection and not a reality. I really thought you did well on this poem.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
What a twist on the ending! Great job, it caught me completely off guard.  ~Allan Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life. |
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chic Member
since 2000-01-26
Posts 245yellville, Ar, U.S. |
Thanx ya'll it feels really good to get such nice replies to my hen scratches "Life is a game and we have to play, but in the end...we all die."-by me! |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
I REALLY like the ending to this. Very nice work.. I'm glad you're back, and I hope to read more soon! --Marie subconsciously, i think i can eat so much to make my stomach hurt, instead of my heart. |
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vixengrl04 Member
since 2001-04-26
Posts 495East Haddam, CT |
This one was so full of emotion and it gave me that tingly feeling in my heart. I like it alot, it's going in my library. Don't you love the way how it can acutually feel like someone is with you even when they are not? Good job. ~*Nikki*~ ~*Of all the millions of people in the world, I'm just me.*~ |
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chic Member
since 2000-01-26
Posts 245yellville, Ar, U.S. |
Yea I do. I have it quite often. I also love the way you can never meet a person, but become really close with them and feel like you've been friends forever. That's how I feel when I put my poetry on here. Evryone is so nice. Anyway, before I blubber some more. Thanx for being so kind. "Life is a game and we have to play, but in the end...we all die."-by me! |
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vixengrl04 Member
since 2001-04-26
Posts 495East Haddam, CT |
Chic, I too love the feeling of knowing someone so well when you've never even met them, like clicking right away? It's great. Anyways, hope to see more stuff from you. ~*Nikki*~ ~*Of all the millions of people in the world, I'm just me.*~ |
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chic Member
since 2000-01-26
Posts 245yellville, Ar, U.S. |
Well I don't get inspired very easily and not very often. I guess I have permanent writer's block. OUI VEY!!! "Life is a game and we have to play, but in the end...we all die."-by me! |
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