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When You Walked
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When You Walked |
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Chel Senior Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 511Baltimore, MD, USA |
You walked out of my life I had tears in my eyes I couldn't cry until you left You left me with a rose and one last kiss goodbye You said this is for the best You walked out of my life I knew I had to move on I could only remember the things we used to do I still have that rose And remember that one last kiss goodbye When you walked out of my life It took a while but I moved on I was walking and heard someone call my name I turned around, it was you The one who left me with a rose And one last kiss goodbye The day you walked out of my life "True friends stab you in the front." |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
very good job on this i like how u wrote this.. keep writing   ...?death is not the greatest loss in life. the greatest loss is what dies inside us while we live. -norman cousins |
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Suga_Baby Member
since 2000-08-06
Posts 380Maine, USA |
Aww, don't you hate losing someone you care for? I know JUST how you feel... only minus the rose and kiss thing... I hate the feeling when there is nothing left to say and you have to part a final time... AHHH!!!  I just wish I could hear MY ex come up behind me calling my name... oh well *LOL* Nice job and sorry to ramble so much!  "A dream is a wish your heart makes while you are fast asleep." |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I really thought this was heart breaking. Quite sad here. I enjoyed it though and hope that all gets better for you soon!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Yes, this is very sad... good job though.  Best of luck in the future. ~Allan Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life. |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Aww.. this is very sad. I'm sorry that it ended that way. Nice poem, though. I enjoyed this. Nice work! --Marie subconsciously, i think i can eat so much to make my stomach hurt, instead of my heart. |
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Heavens Tears
since 2001-03-15
Posts 677 |
This poem was great. Loosing someone is hard, but you'll get through. Just keep your head up. Keep posting! *~*Amanda*~* |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
You have expressed yourself well. Such a sad poem though, and situation at that. keep your head up "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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lonely*soul Member
since 2001-04-05
Posts 396east haddam (moodus) ct :) |
ok..i totally interpreted this different...i thought that at the end when u said u turned around and he was there that he came back to be with you again..so i thought of that qoute "let go of your love and if it comes back you know it was meant to be" maybe not..lol good job~ *KiMMiE* |
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~sugarpie313~ Member
since 2000-09-14
Posts 375Maine, USA |
Having your ex walk back into your life is a weird thing. it was for me definitely. soon you will figure out whether that is a good thing or a bad. Keep your chin up and things will look great! Valerie Why do you do what u do to me baby...you know if I could I'd do anything for you, please don't ignore me cause you know I adore you |
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Pixie-Babe03 Member
since 2000-08-29
Posts 387Central Maine |
wow this is a great poem, it is heart-wrenching... but on the bright side atleast he had the decency to be nice and not be a... well you know... about it like most guys do when they leave a girl... but anyways... i'll stop rambing great poem i hope to see more soon!-=Love starts with a SMILE, grows with a KISS, and ends with a TEAR=- |
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Chel Senior Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 511Baltimore, MD, USA |
Thank you for all your replies. They were greatly apperciated. I am glad that each you liked it in your own way, and got a different meaning from it. I always find that interesting. Thanx again. Chel "True friends stab you in the front." |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
you are very welcome and keep sharing "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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Lovely_Kris Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 176 |
I think you did a very good job and keep it up. Hope to read more. Lovely_Kris |
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