Suffering in each passing day

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Starr
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since 2001-02-08

Posts 100

0 posted 2001-04-25 02:48 PM

I look at the sun, yet I only see darkness
I look at a fire and I see myself burning
I wonder will my life forever be without bliss?
Or like a worn out wheel continuously turning

People say I wonder as if without a care
Little do they know the problems I face
Problems that brought me sorrows, pains and fear
These burdens make me feel I'm losing a never-ending race

I suffer more with each passing day
Dying a little with each tear I shed
Knowing that, for me, peace will never find its way
And this pain will keep growing until I'm dead

I wish now, that death would come quick
And that my pains will all go away
Yet death never got to be my pick
Only pains, sorrows and fears has come my way

Every action of our lives touches some chord that will vibrate in eternity.

Godsend_1
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since 2001-04-19

Posts 247
great state of illinois

1 posted 2001-04-25 03:37 PM

i really relate to your poem i feel like that alot of the time i hope it gets better if you need to talk i am here ok
ben redshaw the great and always kinda depressed

i am what i am and that is all that i am and all that i shall ever be......so deal with it

anonymous albert ?

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since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

2 posted 2001-04-25 03:55 PM

very true in my opinion..
i totally related 2 that one..thanks 4 sharing..keep writing

...?

death is not the greatest loss in life. the greatest loss is what dies inside us while we live. -norman cousins

Suga_Baby
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since 2000-08-06

Posts 380
Maine, USA

3 posted 2001-04-25 05:36 PM

Ooh I liked this a lot... I know what it's like to wonder if you will ever be happy... Very well done

"A dream is a wish your heart makes while you are fast asleep."

Allan Riverwood

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since 2001-01-04

Posts 3502
Winnipeg

4 posted 2001-04-25 05:43 PM

Good job, I really liked the interlocking rhyme scheme of it. I thought that was a good idea.
You put this together nicely.

~Allan

Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life.
~Unknown

Dopey Dope

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since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

5 posted 2001-04-25 06:19 PM

I liked the poem. Quite sad and I hope things do get better for you.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Fading Away

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since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

6 posted 2001-04-26 08:25 PM

This is very nicely written. The rhyme scheme is very nice.. it really helped the poem flow very well.
Nice work!

--Marie

subconsciously, i think i can eat so much to make my stomach hurt, instead of my heart.

Starr
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since 2001-02-08

Posts 100

7 posted 2001-04-27 06:24 AM

Thanx all!
This poem is about how I felt in the past,
but I got over it now... Not that I am saying
that I don't feel like that ever, but just that not all the
time, anymore!

Every action of our lives touches some chord that will vibrate in eternity.

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