Teen Poetry #4 |
my cat |
DarkAngelOfTheStars Member
since 2001-04-21
Posts 255 |
this is one of my best poems ever......hehe j/p! think ill ever make it as a writer?? I once had a cat who was very fat he sat on my hat his name was matt and....darn i ran outta words! [This message has been edited by DarkAngelOfTheStars (edited 04-24-2001).] |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
LOL this is cute |
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knightlyshadows Senior Member
since 2001-04-14
Posts 791obscured vision |
haha cutish tiff “A single choice can build destinies,or destroy them.” |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
cuteee i liked it.. thansk for sharin ...? death is not the greatest loss in life. the greatest loss is what dies inside us while we live. -norman cousins |
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~sugarpie313~ Member
since 2000-09-14
Posts 375Maine, USA |
LMAO!!! i like this it's cute!!! Valerie Why do you do what you do to me baby, You're shaking my confidence you're driving me crazy, |
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Heavens Tears
since 2001-03-15
Posts 677 |
Gosh, that was the best one I've seen all day. *~*Amanda*~* |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Hmmm... nice job, but I feel that the second to last line could use an extra syllable. The flow was good up to that point. I like the rhyme scheme as well, but the last line broke all the rules. Worth a revision. ~Allan Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life. |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Haha.. very cute! It's always fun to write little things like this. And it always makes people smile. --Marie subconsciously, i think i can eat so much to make my stomach hurt, instead of my heart. |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Whoops! Double post.. So sorry! [This message has been edited by Fading Away (edited 04-24-2001).] |
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knightlyshadows Senior Member
since 2001-04-14
Posts 791obscured vision |
lol@allan gettin all technical on this one too:P tiff “A single choice can build destinies,or destroy them.” |
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MindlessPoet Member
since 2001-04-20
Posts 106Texas |
lol, that's cute *TiMMYBoY* |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Wow haha that was so cute. I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Godsend_1 Member
since 2001-04-19
Posts 247great state of illinois |
lol i loved it. its beautiful, a masterpiece, somthing that i would even call magnigicent. bravo this should get published ben redshaw the great and now laughing really hard lol look baby i stealing your little guy i am what i am and that is all that i am and all that i shall ever be......so deal with it [This message has been edited by Godsend_1 (edited 04-25-2001).] |
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Godsend_1 Member
since 2001-04-19
Posts 247great state of illinois |
lol i loved it. its beautiful, a masterpiece, somthing that i would even call magnigicent. bravo this should get published ben redshaw the great and now laughing really hard i am what i am and that is all that i am and all that i shall ever be......so deal with it |
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