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sleepymoongirl
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since 2001-04-19

Posts 157
bc canada

0 posted 2001-04-23 10:46 PM

Black bleak dark cloudy
Are how I am inside
Appearances can be deceiving
The person I hide behind
And the person I am
And the person I pretend to be
Are not the same person
Yet not to say I do not bring hope of tomorrow
For I am the rain fall to clear up the pain of others
A fresh sprinkle to refresh us all
If only I could do the same for myself
I think I see and hear many things
What do I actually hear really
Am I diluted as the rest of the world
Then I think of course what makes me any different

as u go in life there will be ur hardships it is up to u if it makes u or breaks u.

Allan Riverwood

Member Elite

since 2001-01-04

Posts 3502
Winnipeg

1 posted 2001-04-24 01:58 AM

Not bad, I have read better from you though. This one lacked a certain kick present in some of your other works.

Still, not too bad.
~Allan

Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life.
~Unknown

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

2 posted 2001-04-24 09:04 PM

I liked it, but It's not your best.
Hope to see more.

Fading Away

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since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

3 posted 2001-04-25 06:59 PM

I thought you did a pretty good job on this.
Nice work.

--Marie

subconsciously, i think i can eat so much to make my stomach hurt, instead of my heart.

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

4 posted 2001-04-29 10:35 PM

I believe you did a pretty good job. But with the words you've shown today, seems like you have the ability to be great. keeep it up

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

AngelShell
Member

since 2000-03-01

Posts 446
not heaven nor hell so...

5 posted 2001-04-30 01:16 AM

I liked it. And due to the fact that I don't pay much attention to the poets name when I read work (not to say that it isn't important) I guess it means that they don't have to live up to anything.

Very good.

vixengrl04
Member

since 2001-04-26

Posts 495
East Haddam, CT

6 posted 2001-04-30 11:55 AM

I like, I like, I like...

~*Nikki*~

~*Of all the millions of people in the world, I'm just me.*~

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