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silvrduck
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since 2000-11-05

Posts 146

0 posted 2001-04-22 11:35 PM

Hmm. well this is a little 'different' from what I usually write.. So let me know what you think!
ps. sorry, i promise to get caught up with the replys

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in a heart hanging wearily
i’m losing myself
caught behind your glass mirror
with dust only for me to delve
reflection of your past
somewhere I don’t see fit
i’m caught there in the middle
still well kept in cold secrets

care to enlighten me
if you think it could change the rules
maybe you could join me
in my forbidden depth of fools
you will never understand
what I try to get across
don’t bother trying to fake it
i’m well aware of many a faux

in a heart hanging wearliy
this game has become quite the dare
laughing reflections..
i’m not surprised that you don't care
so I slam my fist upon the glass
the slivers tear my hand
and when I look through the flaws
there, you no longer stand

still my anger will not reside
not ‘till my nails cut my palm
do I realize you felt that too
that you, in fact, felt this all along
in regret, I reach out to help
yet in sorrow you back away
so I sit back and cry my tears
your eyes had all there is to say

in a heart hanging wearily
you come and sit by my side
and such the pang of guilt
it is now I that wants to hide
but you wont let me turn
instead you force my mind to see
the story inside your hands
of the scars, made by me.

[This message has been edited by silvrduck (edited 04-22-2001).]

MindlessPoet
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since 2001-04-20

Posts 106
Texas

1 posted 2001-04-23 12:51 PM

this poem was nicely done.. me likes

*TiMMYBoY*
Yeah, that's me. The Weird One.

Allan Riverwood

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since 2001-01-04

Posts 3502
Winnipeg

2 posted 2001-04-23 01:45 AM

I really really enjoyed this one, the way you structured it was just marvelous.  The theme was also excellent and now that I look at the title a second time I see some things I wouldn't have before so great title as well!
The last line was killer.
What can I say?  Most of this poem was.

It's my personal library entry of the day.
~Allan

Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life.
~Unknown

Fading Away

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since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

3 posted 2001-04-23 11:54 AM

"instead you force my mind to see
the story inside your hands
of the scars, made by me."

That last line gave me the chills!
VERY nicely done, silvr! I enjoyed this a lot.. the flow was incredible! This is going right into my library where it belongs!
VERY nice work!

--Marie

subconsciously, i think i can eat so much to make my stomach hurt, instead of my heart.

anonymous albert ?

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since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

4 posted 2001-04-23 04:04 PM

this poem was written very well...
hope to see more soon..
and keep writing

...?

death is not the greatest loss in life. the greatest loss is what dies inside us while we live. -norman cousins

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

5 posted 2001-04-24 04:05 PM

Very enjoyable read.
Hope to see more soon!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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