just posting more of my stuff...

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Teen Poetry #4

just posting more of my stuff...

steve
New Member

since 2000-08-15

Posts 9
Canada

0 posted 2001-01-19 10:46 PM

I changed my original draft of this poem, to this one, for this forum because the message seemed to offened a lot of people. opps. Anyways, the message of it now seems to be a bit confusing/misleading... oh well. I still like it.

-=Untitled=-

I did believe,
Had no fear.
Once betrayed,
Searched far'n near.
Now I know,
With vision clear,
LOVE,
Here! Here!

-=-=-=-=-=-=-=-=-=-=-=-=-

[This message has been edited by acire (edited 01-21-2001).]

pharon
Member

since 1999-11-13

Posts 251
alabama

1 posted 2001-01-19 11:12 PM

well, it is confusing, but all that matters is that YOU know what you're talking about...poetry is all about interpretation anyway, even if there is a clear message. well, stay encouraged

i thought it was a great post, even though i was a bit lost.

pharon

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

2 posted 2001-01-20 01:44 AM

I seriously did not get this one.....but it's 2:30am in the morning here and I just came back from this huge Puerto Rican festival. So who knows........maybe i'll be the only one.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Lakewalker
Member Elite

since 2000-08-05

Posts 3289
On the streets w/ people

3 posted 2001-01-20 01:15 PM

Well I found a meaning in this, it seemed fairly clear to me. I could be way off on it, but there is a meaning. Thanks for sharing this with us!

"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker
http://www.thehungersite.com

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

4 posted 2001-01-21 05:11 PM

In reponse to your poem, I had to delete a part of it in response to the guidelines of Passions. Please try to understand that we do have members in passions and specially in this forum that vary in age. If you would like to add a different word instead, just email me, and if it's within the rules, I would gladly put it in for you.

Thank you for your kind understanding< !signature-->

I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR

[This message has been edited by acire (edited 01-21-2001).]

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