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starryeyed999
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0 posted 2001-04-21 01:08 AM



*Sometimes*

Sometimes my mind is just an empty room.
With nothing left for me to consume.
and in the end it all seemed worse.
that i just want to hollar and curse.

Sometimes my soul is just an empty field.
Lying there just waiting to be healed.
I don't know how to stop this misery,
Life isn't all its cut out to be.


<*Lacy*>
"I can only please one person a day. Today is not your day. Tomorrow doesn't look good either. I'll get back to you."

[This message has been edited by starryeyed999 (edited 04-22-2001).]

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Dopey Dope
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1 posted 2001-04-21 02:12 AM


You're right.....but then again, sometimes it is.
I liked this poem. well done.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

anonymous albert ?
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2 posted 2001-04-21 02:13 AM


very true in my own opinion.
great job on the poem!
and keep sharing and writing

...?

death is not the greatest loss in life. the greatest loss is what dies inside us while we live. -norman cousins

Deranger
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3 posted 2001-04-21 02:23 AM


"Hey...tell me what you think of my poems. Don't be too harsh, I already know their not the best."

Don't hide your ablity behind such self-degrading statements. I won't tell if you don't...hehe  

WAIT!

Opps, i guess the secret's out.

Spreading insanity, one post at a time

My skull has glowing green eyes!

anonymous albert ?
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4 posted 2001-04-21 02:31 AM


lol who r u talkin 2 ????
dont worry bout him as i said the poem is still great

well then.. can u reply 2 my poems...hehe
i'm jus playin but deranger y u gotta say that here?

...?

death is not the greatest loss in life. the greatest loss is what dies inside us while we live. -norman cousins

[This message has been edited by anonymous albert ? (edited 04-21-2001).]

Godsend_1
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5 posted 2001-04-21 03:09 AM


great poem i feel the same way at times but i also feel that life can be a great journey depending on how you live it keep up the goods stuff
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6 posted 2001-04-21 12:10 PM


Yeah don't mind Al and Deranger... they're weirdoes...  
I liked this poem, it was pretty good.  I'm with Javier, sometimes they are.  
~Allan

Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day.  Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life.  
~Unknown

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7 posted 2001-04-21 12:28 PM


Very nice poem, starry.  I really liked the emotion you put into this piece.  *hugs* I hope you don't feel this way all the time.
Keep writing great poetry.. it helps.
Nicely done.

--Marie

subconsciously, i think i can eat so much to make my stomach hurt, instead of my heart.

Angel Bee
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8 posted 2001-04-21 08:00 PM


this was deep, keep writing,
ab

*~Sometimes just holding hands is holding on to everything.~*

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9 posted 2001-04-22 01:39 AM


Life is what it actually is...HARD
Fighting thru it is what makes us a better person
so, keep fighting

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee."  W.S.

knightlyshadows
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10 posted 2001-04-22 02:31 AM


dorks *points* there over there.  
nice reply hun i agree!
i liked this one very muchs. thanx for sharin
tiff

“A single choice can build destinies,or destroy them.”

"at the touch of love anyone becomes a poet"

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