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And Thus We Fight (formerly Fire Fire)
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And Thus We Fight (formerly Fire Fire) |
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Kosetsu Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 450Alabama, USA |
Burning bright Tiger's claw And Eagle's might. Glitter Glitter Star of Light Angel's call And Human right. Flicker Flicker Eyes of sight Devil's hunt And Desert's blight. Quiet Quiet Shadowed night, Life grows new, And thus we fight. It can't be! He exists.. Master of the Oceans! It's.. Leviathan... [This message has been edited by Kosetsu (edited 04-20-2001).] |
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cherish Senior Member
since 2001-03-25
Posts 1639swimming in fairy floss........... |
first of all i have to commend you on your formaT!!..wow..i loved it. although your poem was sublty violent, i couldn't help feeling the sereness of it. i like it a LOT!  "Life is not long and boring, |
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Kosetsu Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 450Alabama, USA |
It was meant to be that way. Originally, I had it titled Human Fight. I'm still trying to decide which title I like better. How bout you guys decide for me? It can't be! |
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Low Man's Lyric Member
since 2001-04-03
Posts 236In a dream |
I liked this poem, it was good and I really liked the last stanza. Give her two red roses, each with a note. The first note says "For the woman I love" and the second, "For my best friend." |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Nice man! I loved this poem. It completely rocked. Wow......well done!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Wow! This is amazing! I loved this!! The format rocked and the rhyme scheme was amazing... wow! I don't think I can say enough about this! VERY nicely done! --Marie subconsciously, i think i can eat so much to make my stomach hurt, instead of my heart. |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Whoa. Bam....yeah. Bam. Uhh...title? I liked Human Fight a little better....but yeah...man..this was great.... ~Carly There is pleasure in poetic pains which only poets know......~Unknown |
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Hand Me Down Junior Member
since 2001-04-08
Posts 32WV |
i really liked this, the format was really cool. Nice. "Cause I can't fix something this complex anymore than I can build a rose" |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Ooh, outstanding! I'm with Marie, I enjoyed this immensely, great flow! ~Allan Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life. |
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Marshalzu 
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
Great poem man... it's got wonderful flow... err title? I'd probably go with "Human Fight" <<<_Andrew_>>> " No Army can conquer a galaxy, yet faith alone can overturn the universe." |
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Godsend_1 Member
since 2001-04-19
Posts 247great state of illinois |
i really liked the sereness and kinda violent ness of it it just seemed to fit together perfectly anywho you have the gift keep it up ben redshaw the great and now and forever totally in love i am what i am and that is all that i am and all that i shall ever be......so deal with it |
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Linc
since 2001-03-07
Posts 552The Backstreet Boy |
Hey, This was simply great you never cease to amaze me with you great poetry. Until your next poem -- Linc "Once you reach your original goal it seems that the journey was your real accomplishment." |
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