»
Archives
»
Teen Poetry #4
»
Hiding.
| Teen Poetry #4 |
|
Hiding. |
|
Marshalzu  
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking 
|
Hiding. The feelings swell inside me, I hide my face once again, I did not want you to see, My disgrace and my disdain, Bury my feelings deep down inside, You dug them up so they could not hide. I spend all my time chasing, But you always turn your back, My heart I was misplacing, And it turned it was black, Bury my feelings deep down inside, You found out and took them for a ride. Your incredible beauty, It won me again, It was made my duty, To languish in pain. Bury my feelings hide them from you, You dug them up, and left me blue. <<<_Andrew_>>> " No Army can conquer a galaxy, yet faith alone can overturn the universe." |
||
| © Copyright 2001 Andrew Sewell - All Rights Reserved | |||
|
Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Great job Zu! Simply marvelous! One of your better ones, and a very good job.  So creative, and it's nice to see you trying new formats!  ~Allan Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life. |
||
|
anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
hmmmm... i thought it was good... jus wonderful.. i really liked it!  keep writing..  ...?[This message has been edited by anonymous albert ? (edited 04-19-2001).] |
||
|
Dopey Dope
Moderator
Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I enjoyed this one. Very well written.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
||
|
Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
I really like this one, Andrew. One of the best I've seen from you yet! Simply fantastic! *Applauds* --Marie subconsciously, i think i can eat so much to make my stomach hurt, instead of my heart. |
||
|
Low Man's Lyric Member
since 2001-04-03
Posts 236In a dream |
Good job with this, I really like the ending. Give her two red roses, each with a note. The first note says "For the woman I love" and the second, "For my best friend." |
||
|
Acies
Moderator
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Zu, that was a terrific read. very enjoyable indeed. You need to share more  "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
||
|
|
⇧ top of page ⇧ |
|
| All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format. | ||
