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Shining Armor |
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Morouxshi San Member
since 2000-10-11
Posts 207San Juan, Puerto Rico |
one poem missing from "Hardest Break-up" but ill post it later. heres "Shining Armor" session. forethought: a fatal flaw in every thougth, is the assumption that you thought of it first. -=Shining Armor=- Chivalry he follows. Righteous he is... Just: his laws. he's a dream, when awake. he's perfect, when modest. the last knight in shining armor fought and lost the war. -San San, the wise San, the dumb San, the guy... |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Woah felipe, woah!! I liked this one tons. Amazing. Definately a pandora edition. Kick butt, seriously. I loved the whole message, very nice one here pal. One of your best in my point of view.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
This was a truly greatly written poem...but it it just me, or is this extremely depressing? It's like there's no point to the world anymore, cuz all the knights are lost.....sigh.... ~Carly inspiration of my art search for light out of the dark all the pictures in my heart lie awake there in my fog... |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
San, this is nice. I enjoyed it. Could be a good session. -Allan |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Really well done San! You've painted a vivid picture in my mind with this piece ... excellent closing verse, really enjoyed this!  Best wishes, /Kit |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
nice... all I can see is glimmering silver armor.. great job of portraying this scene! ~JDR "Most people are other people. Their thoughts are someone else's opinions, their lives a mimicry, their passions a quotation." -Oscar Wilde |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
First off, nice forethought Now the poem, oh, it's so good. I love the thoughts you share through it, great job of writing this one!"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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Salooma Senior Member
since 2000-01-28
Posts 781 |
wow...I gotta agree with the others, this is certainly something. you paint a clear picture....great post! Salma |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Bravo San...this is a really good one probably one of your best work I do agree with carly about the end though but, if that is the writers take on it, we're gonna have to accept it  thanks for the wonderful read I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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