Teen Poetry #4 |
My Friend (Val I was thinking of you) |
Rach813 Junior Member
since 2001-04-17
Posts 30Maine |
A friend, What is a friend? A person who will stick with you to the end, Someone with whome you have fun, Someone with a comfy shoulder, Which you can cry upon, Someone to make you laugh. Someone to make you smile, When you are down, Someone to make you, Learn never to frown. And as you are a friend, You will have to do these too, To stick with them until the end, And do the best you can do. So tell me, who is a friend? I'll tell you who! Isn't it obvious? It's YOU! |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
The way you've shown it in your poem, I guess Val is pretty special to you. it's nice to have friends like that. Hey VAL, I guess you're a really nice and wicked freind "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Oh she's wicked alright! great tribute! Very sweet of you! I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
This is beautiful tribute to your friend. It's very sweet. Nice job. --Marie subconsciously, i think i can eat so much to make my stomach hurt, instead of my heart. |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
I felt a finger pressed on my nose as you said "YOU." Haha My critique = Third stanza, last two lines shouldn't be separated by a comma. I like this one, it's something you'd see in a card. Great job. ~Allan Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life. |
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~sugarpie313~ Member
since 2000-09-14
Posts 375Maine, USA |
Rach this is awful sweet of you!! i'm wicked flattered....love ya sweetie! THANKS!!! Valerie *Life can take your dreams and turn them upside down, Friends will talk about you when you're not around, but don't ever lose that light in your eyes* |
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Heavens Tears
since 2001-03-15
Posts 677 |
Awww... Is everyone having a sweet day? I have seem so many sweet poems today. I guess that is a good thing! Everyones happy. Well, great read. Keep it up. *If the only place I can live my dreams is in my sleep, then I'll sleep forever!* |
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knightlyshadows Senior Member
since 2001-04-14
Posts 791obscured vision |
aww that was great!!! i gave this to all of my friends to check out |
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