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fractal007 Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958 |
We know the secrets hidden in your head, We blasted brains with bursts of energy. I open'd up your skull and then God said, "I am, I am and I am now your God." Life's meaningless. Your actions mean Nothing at all. You are nothing. There is no higher good.. Nothing. Moving forward will never mean a thing. Cares are useless, So are you. Evil is ruthless. What you do.... It's nothing. Stop being something you are not. It will mean nothing. Stop. "If history is to change, let it change. If the world is to be destroyed, so be it. If my fate is to die, I must simply laugh" |
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banburycross Senior Member
since 2001-03-27
Posts 946viginia |
Well the message of this one was a little depressing but i still liked this. the ideas in this piece are very interesting and i like the format of it. keep posting all your work. Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Haven't seen you in a bit frac. As you can see the forum is moving quite rapidly. No idea why. Anyhow.....this poem rocked. I enjoyed it a lot. nice to see a poem by you here. Hope to see more.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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lonely*soul Member
since 2001-04-05
Posts 396east haddam (moodus) ct :) |
hey i liked this one!! so true too!! i like the whole idea as i know how ya feel!! and dopey is right man...this place blew up this last week~~ andyways..good post and i hope to see more of you work  *~KiMmIe~* " im surrounded by people, but yet im still all alone" |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
VERY good poem, frac!! I'm truly impressed... this was very interesting.. Wow! --Marie subconsciously, i think i can eat so much to make my stomach hurt, instead of my heart. |
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Angel Bee Member
since 2001-01-30
Posts 176Virginia |
good job on your poem. i can't really critque you that much b/c i'm not the best poet in the world. so sorry for that much, but keep writing, never give up! :o) ~ab~ *~Sometimes just holding hands is holding on to everything.~* |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
I like this one quite a bit. Indeed the forums have exploded, in my short time away. Very odd, maybe I am some sort of people repellant.  I did go back and welcome all the new members (there were about five) who came. Hope you stick around man, and happy birthday. ~Allan Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life. ~Unknown [This message has been edited by Allan Riverwood (edited 04-19-2001).] |
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