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Roses for Amy
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Roses for Amy |
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Deranger Member
since 2000-05-10
Posts 498Somewhere, between here and there |
Roses for Amy (The Evil Version!) No more grieving for the petals, that lay crushed upon the floor No more waiting in the rain, bearing red flowers before your door Amy, you’ve chained me… And the roses I bore for you, red as the blood I bled for you, Beneath skies, blue as the tears I shed; you’ve led me to ruin Took me a while, to see through that smile, but I think you knew- Exactly what you were doing Spare me the lies, I can’t believe I wasted all that time And I used to like the fact, she always on my mind So Amy, my one and only, please get out of my head I can’t stand you haunting me, reminding me of blood I shed You were my benison, but you’ve become my poison And you went straight to my heart, right when everything fell apart Dream girl, you came into my world, but you left me in shards Damn letting anyone go, was never this hard… I would say you killed me, but I was dead before we met my friend But thanks for having the decency, to bury me again. You buried me again… Thanks for the decency, you buried me, Thanks a lot! Spreading insanity, one post at a time |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
ahhh...you're back  With a boom I might add.great poem here. I liked the end, you buried me..thanks! Almost adds humor to it, good thing because the rest was sad. Great job, i missed your work! Keep posting*dq -=We often get hurt when we trust someone we want them to be instead of who they really are=- |
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~sugarpie313~ Member
since 2000-09-14
Posts 375Maine, USA |
omg this was so good!! i have to admit, i loved the ending... it gave that that final oommph LOL great job!!! Valerie *Life can take your dreams and turn them upside down, Friends will talk about you when you're not around, but don't ever lose that light in your eyes* |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
AMAZING! I loved this poem. I didn't like the very last line though. "thanks a lot!" But i liked every words of the whole poem. EVERYTHING was amazing.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
VERY nice work!! I loved this! It's simply outstanding... I'm glad to see you're back. And with a piece that's going straight into the library! Wonderful work, Deranger. Looking forward to reading more again!--Marie subconsciously, i think i can eat so much to make my stomach hurt, instead of my heart. |
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cherish Senior Member
since 2001-03-25
Posts 1639swimming in fairy floss........... |
there's only one word i can think of to describe what went through my head when i read this one: wow!! i loved it! "Life is not long and boring, |
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AngelShell Member
since 2000-03-01
Posts 446not heaven nor hell so... |
Hey, I'm sorry to hear it happened again. But you were never dead, not to me. ~First they tell you, you can’t sleep alone in a strange place, then they tell you, you can’t sleep with somebody else~ |
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Deranger Member
since 2000-05-10
Posts 498Somewhere, between here and there |
Hey guys, Thanks for the input. This piece was written purely for myself, i'm just glad it was able to give something to the reader as well. Angelshell, well some of us are born dead...quite the paradox, i know... Spreading insanity, one post at a time |
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banburycross Senior Member
since 2001-03-27
Posts 946viginia |
i really like this poem!! the wording was incredible and the emotion was great throughout the piece. this is really great writing, i look forward to reading more form you. Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing. |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Very nice one here Mister Deranger......heavily heavy....Keep postin aiight? Or I'll just have to beatcha up. ~Carly There is pleasure in poetic pains which only poets know......~Unknown |
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Low Man's Lyric Member
since 2001-04-03
Posts 236In a dream |
Great job with this, I really liked how the whole poem flowed. Until your next poem, bye.  Give her two red roses, each with a note. The first note says "For the woman I love" and the second, "For my best friend." |
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lonely*soul Member
since 2001-04-05
Posts 396east haddam (moodus) ct :) |
omg i like this alot...im guessing this amy chick is a ex of yours..anyways... it was an outstanidn poem..i think the first of yours ive read (im kinda new) *~KiM~* " im surrounded by people, but yet im still all alone" |
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