Teen Poetry #4 |
The Million Pieces of Who I Am (Part 2 of 3) |
Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
great poem! as i did like the first.and i do like the second as well...keep them coming i can't wait till the next of the series.the series is turning out to become a masterpiece keep writting marie [This message has been edited by anonymous albert ? (edited 04-17-2001).] |
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Kicking Kim Member
since 2001-04-16
Posts 426Cloud Cucko Land! |
"The fingerprints of generations" This is a brilliant line because when you break it down and philosophically think about it everyones fingerprints are from generations of ancestors, who may be realted to you in some way! This is an excellent poem with great meaning and I thoroughley enjoyed it! Truly appreciative ^*~Kicking Kim~*^ |
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Linc
since 2001-03-07
Posts 552The Backstreet Boy |
Hey, I have nothing to say its just....just.....great....superb....domn good I am glad its my 300th post keep up the great work. Until your next masterpeice -- Linc "Once you reach your original goal it seems that the journey was your real accomplishment." |
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banburycross Senior Member
since 2001-03-27
Posts 946viginia |
the images in this are really incredible and the words are beautifully crafted as always. you are one of the most incredible writers and poets i have ever known love, you are amazing. keep writing beautiful poetry. Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing. |
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Heavens Tears
since 2001-03-15
Posts 677 |
Your poetry is simply beautiful! I cant wait for the ending to this series. I think that I would forget to conclude any series I started! Hmmm... Something to strengthen... Thanks for the wonderful read! *If the only place I can live my dreams is in my sleep, then I'll sleep forever!* |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Girl, you're awesome. I love it I love it!! Can't wait for the next one. ~Carly There are pleasures in poetic pains that only poets know......~Unknown |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I thought this completely rocked. VERY awesome! I loved the way you wrote this poem. Quite dif. from what I'm used to reading from you. I liked this a LOT! I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
I'll agree, this is completely awesome. Just like the first... well no, not like the first, in fact quite different from the first but you know what I mean... One thing that caught my eye was this- "Tumble weeds full of worry tumbled on by and the edge of the road disappeared beneath the ever inching desert; a silent slow growth that we never see coming." I really like the tense you put the whole poem in, it complimented the whole work incredibly. The last line of this stanza is interesting in that it sort of strays... but it's one of the more signifigant ones in that it gives the narrator a sense of still being. The narrator makes a statement about humanity (or perhaps just a certain group of people) here, as a current state and not a past event. Very creative, Marie! Can't wait for the next one. ~Allan Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life. |
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