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Sabriel.s.h.lover
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0 posted 2001-04-16 08:23 PM



I'm in a battle I can't possibly win.
It's a battle for love, wits, and courage.
The very thought of what I've gotten into,
Makes me want to crawl away within.

I cannot hide anymore.
For my one love is out there,
fighting for me.
What to do?.....

There he lays,
Helpless as a newborn.
It's now my job to protect him.
I must win this for only him.

She must be crazy.
Crazy for me?...
That's what drives her on,
Into the very heart of the battle.

I love him and that's what matters now.
No time for tears,
No time for sorrow.
But what if I die?.....

© Copyright 2001 Angelina - All Rights Reserved
Linc
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1 posted 2001-04-16 08:51 PM


Welcome to Passions
Hey,

     This great start hope to see more of your work. Until your next poem

    -- Linc

"Once you reach your original goal it seems that the journey was your real accomplishment."

Child of the Stars
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2 posted 2001-04-16 09:12 PM


Welcome to the wonderful world we call Passions in Poetry! This is a great first post, I enjoyed it tons. Have lotsa fun and enjoy yourself here in the forums! And don't forget to check your e-mail for a speshul message.
  ~Carly

There are pleasures in poetic pains that only poets know......~Unknown

Fading Away
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3 posted 2001-04-16 09:23 PM


Welcome to Passions!  
This is a very good first post.  It looks like you're going to fit right in here    Thanks for the read, and I look forward to seeing more from you.
Nicely done.

--Marie

subconsciously, i think i can eat so much to make my stomach hurt, instead of my heart.

Dark Enchantress
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meet Morgana
4 posted 2001-04-16 10:53 PM


Welcome to Passions, Sabriel. Nice to see a new talent here. I hope to see some more from you, as this was a great first post.

I had a dream once that I could fly and I laughed at everyone and kicked them in the back of the head because they couldn't fly too.  

[This message has been edited by Dark Enchantress (edited 04-16-2001).]

DancinQueen
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5 posted 2001-04-16 11:06 PM


   Welcome!    

Great first poem, and welcome to Passions/Pip. I hope you enjoy it and if you have any questions feel free to contact one of the moderators. Try-out the Teen Explorer forum, too   I'll be awaiting more posts from you  

*dq

-=We often get hurt when we trust someone we want them to be instead of who they really are=-

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6 posted 2001-04-16 11:19 PM


Welcome to passions!!! Im glad that you decided to join and you seem to be a very talented poet!! I cant wait to read more from you so keep those poems coming!
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7 posted 2001-04-17 03:54 AM


Welcome to Passions!!!!!!!
I thought this poem was written well. I enjoyed it very much. When it comes to love and the like.....one can always be afriad....and there's always the question whether you'll fail or succeed....but one must always try....regardless of internal death and failure....regret is the worst....but turning your back on love is by far more painful in the end.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Marshalzu
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Lurking
8 posted 2001-04-17 09:18 AM


Welcome to Passions... Great poem look forward to more of your work.

<<_ Andrew _>>

" No Army can conquer a galaxy, yet faith alone can overturn the universe."

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banburycross
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viginia
9 posted 2001-04-17 02:35 PM


Welcome to passions!!  this is a great first post, i know you'll love it here.  i look forward to reading more of your work.

Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing.

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10 posted 2001-04-18 12:53 PM


Welcome to Passions in Poetry!  I really enjoyed this piece, I hope to see you posting more in here!  Do enjoy yourself.  
~Allan

Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day.  Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life.  
~Unknown

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11 posted 2001-04-18 10:22 PM


WELCOME TO PASSIONS!!!

Outstanding first post
Seems like you'd fit in just well
hoping to see more from you
happy reading and sharing as well

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee."  W.S.

fozzyozzy
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Lessburg Virginia
12 posted 2001-04-18 10:46 PM


I'm sure you'll enjoy it here.  We're glad to have a terrific poet like you on board.  Just remember to bring the poems

"The heart can think of no devotion
Greater than being shore to ocean
Holding the curve of one position
Counting an endless repetition"
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branden726
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13 posted 2001-04-18 10:55 PM


Hey, Welcome. I loved being new everyone just loves ya. Then you find out the truth.......There all secret agents...lol jk anyways im in a good mood tonite just trying to run i guess well hey i love this poem it was great plz keep posting

The person i loved the most has left me, now all i got are u guys here. Thanks for the support.
*Tears of love*
*Tears of faith*
*Never any Tears

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