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Seeing the needy and praying for help.
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Seeing the needy and praying for help. |
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Marshalzu  
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking 
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Seeing the needy and praying for help. Plagued by insomnia, Cascading euphoria, Can’t sleep tonight. Searching for an answer, Something to tell her, To put all things right, Pray, Pray for me, See, The things I see, Help, Help me be, Need, Please need me, Interrupted by paranoia, Helping me destroy her, In vain I try to fight, I’m constantly abused, You know that I’m amused, My heart is black as the night, I’ll pray, Pray for you, I see the things you do, I help you get through, I’ll be there for you. Thanx for the idea Allan I didn't realise experimenting could be so fun... <<_ Andrew _>> " No Army can conquer a galaxy, yet faith alone can overturn the universe." |
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LoveBug
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since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
Some really dark and powerful emotions in this one. I love how you end it on a hopeful note, however. We all need someone to help us out! This "experimental" form you used is excellent. Thanks for sharing.  "Men judge generally more by the eye than by the hand, for everyone can see and few can feel."-Machiavelli |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I really thought the format you used was great. I also liked the poem. You wrote this quite well. I really enjoyed this.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
It can be very fun experimenting sometimes. And Allan is the best man to talk to about that one  This is a very good poem. I really like the format, and the style. Very nicely done, Andrew! I think this is one of my favs from you. Good job.--Marie |
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Linc
since 2001-03-07
Posts 552The Backstreet Boy |
Hey, This is a great poem maybe one of the best I have ever read from you. Great job, I am putting this one in my library. Keep up the great work and I hope to see more just as good or even better than this, until then -- Linc "Once you reach your original goal it seems that the journey was your real accomplishment." |
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Dana Samples Member
since 2001-04-07
Posts 68 |
I loved it!!! i love all of the dark emotions init and the way it flows. i think it is really great!!! can't wait to read more. lots of love, dana |
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