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katherine
Member

since 2000-06-10

Posts 365
Canberra Australia

0 posted 2001-04-16 02:17 AM

Are you still alive or have you died? You wear a mask to cover your face, a suit to cover your body, gloves for the hands, a hat for the head, a scarf for the neck and shoes for the feet.

Do you even know who you are anymore? You were once a free and happy person. Now you cover yourself up from the tips of the toes to the top of the head.

Why do you do this?

You used to be so loveable, so kind.
Now you show no emotion. Not that it would be visible if you did.

You had respect being you. Showing everybody your true self. People wanted to be able feel that way, to be able to be themselfs.
But they were too afraid.
You were never scared to just be you.

You had a hard three years. In that time you slowly went back into yourself. we only ever saw a true glimpse of you.

We want you back we know your misrable. You can always ask for help. It's so simple to do all you need is the conferdence. Not to be like anybody else. To be yourself once more.

Is that a smile i see forming through the layers. I see your layers slowly drifting to the ground./ You now look "normal" once more. You are able to see your beauty inside and out.

'Love starts with a smile, grows with a kiss, and ends with a tear.'

cherish
Senior Member

since 2001-03-25

Posts 1639
swimming in fairy floss...........

1 posted 2001-04-16 02:37 AM

awwww..that was so sad..and the ending was really nice.."You are able to see your beauty inside and out"
good job..i like how it was free verse-it flowed more like a conversation. great one!!

"Life is not long and boring,
it's short and compelling." -Javier Agosto-

Child of the Stars

Senior Member

since 2000-09-07

Posts 1658
Ann Arbor, MI

2 posted 2001-04-16 09:30 AM

Ohh, I liked this one a lot! I could picture the person you were speaking of...sad...well...great job.

~Carly

There are pleasures in poetic pains that only poets know......~Unknown

Fading Away

Member Elite

since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

3 posted 2001-04-16 11:40 AM

Wow.. this one hit home. Hard. It made me want to read it over and over again. This is such a beautiful poem. You really portrayed a whole lot of emotion... I love it. This one if definitely going into my library.
Very nicely done.

--Marie

subconsciously, i think i can eat so much to make my stomach hurt, instead of my heart.

Spine Grinder
Senior Member

since 2000-10-28

Posts 1127
Standing In Silence...

4 posted 2001-04-16 11:50 AM

This one really was great. I liked it alot.
*S*Staci

Spine Grinder
Senior Member

since 2000-10-28

Posts 1127
Standing In Silence...

5 posted 2001-04-16 11:52 AM

This one was really great. I liked it alot.
*S*Staci

I skate hard, play hard, cry hard....

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

6 posted 2001-04-16 04:06 PM

I liked this......so sad.....not bad....
good job.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

katherine
Member

since 2000-06-10

Posts 365
Canberra Australia

7 posted 2001-04-17 08:56 PM

i didn't like this one much i didn't think it was one of my better ones. oh well

'Love starts with a smile, grows with a kiss, and ends with a tear.'

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