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LoneWolf
Member

since 2001-03-10

Posts 384
IL

0 posted 2001-04-14 03:52 PM

“Loss”

Drained of emotion
Of my hearts desire
Death came along
And in those waters extinguished my fires

Living life in an empty shell
Watching those around me, those who can feel
Knowing I’m not like them
With these wounds I cannot heal

Wandering around
Lost in this place
All those that look my way
See nothing but a blank face

Learning to copy
To fake what I see
To fool those who care the most
So that they don’t worry about me

Searching my vacant soul
With each new person I meet
For the one to help me feel once more
But alas only one I knew could ever achieve this feat

She did, but she’s gone
Like the pettle of a flower upon the wind
I will continue to search for you
For always and forever until my lifes end

It's too bad I'm not as wonderful a person as people say I am, because the world could use a few people like that.

I've learned that even when you

Spine Grinder
Senior Member

since 2000-10-28

Posts 1127
Standing In Silence...

1 posted 2001-04-14 04:09 PM

very nice.
*S*staci

Allan Riverwood

Member Elite

since 2001-01-04

Posts 3502
Winnipeg

2 posted 2001-04-14 08:01 PM

Good job, the ending was very refreshing.

~Allan

Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life.
~Unknown

banburycross
Senior Member

since 2001-03-27

Posts 946
viginia

3 posted 2001-04-15 12:28 PM

i really liked the mood in this, for some reason it got to me. good job on this, keep posting your work.

Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing.

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

4 posted 2001-04-15 01:41 AM

I liked this.
Thought you did quite well.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Fading Away

Member Elite

since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

5 posted 2001-04-15 08:54 AM

I like this a lot. You did a very nice job.
Keep posting.

--Marie

subconsciously, i think i can eat so much to make my stomach hurt, instead of my heart.

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

6 posted 2001-05-08 10:57 AM

The ending was really good
Loved the read
thanks for sharing

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

chas
Member

since 2001-04-08

Posts 101
Lynn, ma

7 posted 2001-05-08 11:00 AM

damn, this is good.

anonymous albert ?

Member Elite

since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

8 posted 2001-05-08 11:02 AM

on the poem i thought you did a very good job the ending was quite good..keep writing...

...?

if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry"

[This message has been edited by anonymous albert ? (edited 05-08-2001).]

Godsend_1
Member

since 2001-04-19

Posts 247
great state of illinois

9 posted 2001-05-08 11:40 AM

hey hun i really liked this its the first one i read by you sorry i be a slow poke heheheheh so keep it up you rock bye

ben

i am what i am and that is all that i am and all that i shall ever be......so deal with it

vixengrl04
Member

since 2001-04-26

Posts 495
East Haddam, CT

10 posted 2001-05-08 11:45 AM

This is really sad, but you wrote it extremely well and I enjoyed it alot. It's going to my library. Good work.

~*Nikki*~

~*Of all the millions of people in the world, I'm just me.*~

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