Teen Poetry #4 |
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Too Late |
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starryeyed999 Junior Member
since 2001-03-05
Posts 35 |
"Too Late" It might've been fate, but now its too late. All we had to do was wait. just had to give it time, and maybe then it would've last We let a good thing pass. I wonder what could've happened and what we should've made Maybe it was nothing, but now we'll never know <*Lacy*> |
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anonymous albert ?![]()
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
good job but...lol ur only suppose to post 3 poems a day anyway STOP POSTIN!! ohh yea did i tell u i liked this ![]() [This message has been edited by anonymous albert ? (edited 04-14-2001).] |
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Never pass up a chance.....you'll regret it forever..... ![]() I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Child of the Stars![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Listen to Javi, he knows what he's talkin bout! The rhyme scheme wuz a lil iffy in my eyes, but who cares!?! (Allan Riverwood will prolly care, hehe...) I like it a lot how it is. ![]() ~Carly There are pleasures in poetic pains that only poets know......~Unknown |
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Fading Away![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
This was a good poem. The rhym scheme was very inconsistent, and that broke the flow in a few places. Other than that, this was a fine poem. Nice job. --Marie subconsciously, i think i can eat so much to make my stomach hurt, instead of my heart. |
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LoneWolf Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 384IL |
i liked this one. i can really relate to it. good job here. It's too bad I'm not as wonderful a person as people say I am, because the world could use a few people like that. |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
who cares about a rythm scheme....lol. this was very kool. Regina a small cut is only the beggining of a life in pain |
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anonymous albert ?![]()
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
yep.man.... your lucky that this wasn't the one locked ![]() ![]() |
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Allan Riverwood![]() ![]()
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
I think the rhyme is interesting... it's very fragmented but it works with the general mood of the poem. ![]() ~Allan Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life. |
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Acies![]()
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Nothing is ever too late ![]() thanks for sharing "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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