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starryeyed999
Junior Member

since 2001-03-05

Posts 35

0 posted 2001-04-14 01:39 AM

"Too Late"

It might've been fate,
but now its too late.
All we had to do was wait.
just had to give it time,
and maybe then it would've last
We let a good thing pass.
I wonder what could've happened and
what we should've made
Maybe it was nothing,
but now we'll never know

<*Lacy*>
"I can only please one person a day. Today is not your day. Tomorrow doesn't look good either. I'll get back to you."

anonymous albert ?

Member Elite

since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

1 posted 2001-04-14 02:03 AM

good job but...lol ur only suppose to post 3 poems a day anyway STOP POSTIN!! ohh yea did i tell u i liked this

[This message has been edited by anonymous albert ? (edited 04-14-2001).]

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

2 posted 2001-04-14 02:51 AM

Never pass up a chance.....you'll regret it forever.....

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Child of the Stars

Senior Member

since 2000-09-07

Posts 1658
Ann Arbor, MI

3 posted 2001-04-14 10:19 AM

Listen to Javi, he knows what he's talkin bout! The rhyme scheme wuz a lil iffy in my eyes, but who cares!?! (Allan Riverwood will prolly care, hehe...) I like it a lot how it is.

~Carly

There are pleasures in poetic pains that only poets know......~Unknown

Fading Away

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since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

4 posted 2001-04-14 10:29 AM

This was a good poem. The rhym scheme was very inconsistent, and that broke the flow in a few places. Other than that, this was a fine poem. Nice job.

--Marie

subconsciously, i think i can eat so much to make my stomach hurt, instead of my heart.

LoneWolf
Member

since 2001-03-10

Posts 384
IL

5 posted 2001-04-14 02:37 PM

i liked this one. i can really relate to it. good job here.

It's too bad I'm not as wonderful a person as people say I am, because the world could use a few people like that.

I've learned that even when you

Ina
Senior Member

since 2000-10-09

Posts 1236
Quebec, Canada

6 posted 2001-04-14 02:56 PM

who cares about a rythm scheme....lol. this was very kool.

Regina

a small cut is only the beggining of a life in pain

anonymous albert ?

Member Elite

since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

7 posted 2001-04-14 03:02 PM

yep.man.... your lucky that this wasn't the one locked

anyways who cares bout the rym's well.. i don't the poem was good the way it is

Allan Riverwood

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since 2001-01-04

Posts 3502
Winnipeg

8 posted 2001-04-14 07:52 PM

I think the rhyme is interesting... it's very fragmented but it works with the general mood of the poem.

~Allan

Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life.
~Unknown

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

9 posted 2001-04-17 09:19 PM

Nothing is ever too late

thanks for sharing

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

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