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Attack Ferrit Junior Member
since 2001-04-09
Posts 41texas |
arbor day walk a mechanical dog on a mechanical street on a mechanical prefab day organic is outdated it's the digital age who needs to care? who needs to feel? who needs the real deal? when synthetic made it possible everything real dies except for the machines that's why you'll live forever don't try to be human failure is organic who needs to care? who needs to feel? who needs the real deal? when synthetic made it possible pop your pills a special blend just for you my old friend metal trees are all that's real when synthetic made it possible everything is skin deep |
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LoveBug
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since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
An interesting and disturbing look at the future here, my friend. I especally love this line: "Failure is organic" I hope this vision of the future never comes true. Thanks for sharing.  "Men judge generally more by the eye than by the hand, for everyone can see and few can feel."-Machiavelli |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
This is a very interesting poem. A different take on things.. I enjoyed this. Nice job. --Marie subconsciously, i think i can eat so much to make my stomach hurt, instead of my heart. |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
I really did enjoy this, but I feel as though it was meant to be negative... this kind of bothered me. I don't agree with many of the sentiments in the poem, but still I'll applaud the poetry itself.  ~Allan Concieted?? Impossible! That would be a fault! |
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banburycross Senior Member
since 2001-03-27
Posts 946viginia |
I really like the perspective of this poem and the central theme of it. it was very different and unique, and that is always a good thing. keep posting your work. Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
*shudders* this was a great read. Very good. I like the way your mind thinks within this poem. Great job!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
This is definitly odd. But it's not bad. Proposes something interesting.It's the first thing I've read from you, I'm going to go read more. Ps. What are string Physics? Jenn "I've come too close to happiness, to have it swept away,don't think I can take the pain, never fall again..." Janet |
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Dark Enchantress Senior Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 1258meet Morgana |
Back to the jungle, Tarzan! I knew Allan wasn't going to like this one. lol Well, he likes it but it goes against his views. My little unusual pagan buddy.  As for the poem, I thought it was very good. I had a dream once that I could fly and I laughed at everyone and kicked them in the back of the head because they couldn't fly too. :) |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
interesting poem nice job it was nicely written .keep writing  |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
yup, really interesting...hmmmmmmmmm you really think things will end up this way? you really got me thinking thanks for sharing "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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Attack Ferrit Junior Member
since 2001-04-09
Posts 41texas |
thanks for all the responce guys. string physics is basicly a theory that the universe is not made up of atoms but smaller 1 dementional "strings". if you want to know more you can go to http://www.superstringtheory.com/ or pick up a copy of The Elegant Universe by Brian Greene. both are very good sources of information. everything is skin deep |
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