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James is Sleeping Still
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James is Sleeping Still |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI 
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A mother waits, without her son, Her life is neither there nor gone She presses on and holds his hands Her gentle touch needs no command To let him live, or let him go? A love as sweet should surely know.... "A monitor, a buzzing noise Keeps telling us that he's alive A fading heart, a plastic vein Is feeding him until he dies No dirt on walls, no filth on hands It's just not right for little boys A flower here, a candy there And still he sleeps, no time for toys..." A mother waits, without her son, Her life is neither there nor gone And little James is sleeping still Awaiting his escape... "I know he thinks without their help, I feel he feels without their aid But trapped is he, alone, although We're here again, we've never strayed You dream, my James, I dream it too The nights and days are lined with fear If you can hear the words I speak, You'll know that I'm forever near." A mother waits, without her son, Her life is neither there nor gone And little James is sleeping still Awaiting his escape... |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Ouch!!! OMG Carly, you are it you are awesome i just love your pieces It actually made me feel really sad ~*standing ovation*~ "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
OMG!!!!!!!!!!!!! *faints* This was so amazing Carly! You are so great Carly!!!!! CARLY! CARLY!!!!!!!!!!! CARLY!!!!!!! hahaha...I love this carly, very very awesome poem.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
Carly, I can't tell you how much I liked this poem. You've told the story of James and his mother well....now, what happens next? |
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Attack Ferrit Junior Member
since 2001-04-09
Posts 41texas |
well i think i'll agree with everyone else in saying OMG!!!!! that was great. that has to be one of the best poems i have read sence coming here. absolutely amazing. everything is skin deep |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
WOW!!!...OMG!!!...that was amazin great job! on this carly  keep writin... |
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JBaker515
since 2001-02-28
Posts 458Dartmouth College |
Its all been said. WOW Jeff  |
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Linc
since 2001-03-07
Posts 552The Backstreet Boy |
Hey, Like I said superb, I loved reading it. Its going into my library keep up the superb work -- Linc "Once you reach your original goal it seems that the journey was your real accomplishment." [This message has been edited by Linc (edited 04-13-2001).] |
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LoveBug
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Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
Oh gosh!!!!  This brought tears to my eyes. This is such a sad piece, but you describe everything so beautifully... A VERY excellent piece, my friend. Thanks for sharing.  "Men judge generally more by the eye than by the hand, for everyone can see and few can feel."-Machiavelli |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Carly.. this is so beautiful. This brought tears to my eyes. This is one of the best poems you have ever written. It's going straight to my library... VERY nicely done!! --Marie subconsciously, i think i can eat so much to make my stomach hurt, instead of my heart. |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Carly, this is OUTSTANDING! One of your best poems of all, this is a definite ten out of ten on the Carly scale.  Seriously, it got me in the heart, like only you can. Keep up the amazing work, kiddo. ~Allan Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life. |
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Dana Samples Member
since 2001-04-07
Posts 68 |
Howdie!!!!! Carly that was one of your best!!!!! this is going in or zine girl!!! Carly you are SOOOOOO AWESOME!!!!! I LOVE YA TO DEATH!!!!! KEEP GOIN GIRL!!!! LOTS OF LOVE ALWAYS, DANA |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
WOO HOO!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Thanks guys, you rock....you really do....and Dana! really? HURRAY!! hehe. Can't wait to see how it comes out yo!!! PEACE OUT KIDS!!!  There are pleasures in poetic pains that only poets know......~Unknown |
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IsGona Senior Member
since 2000-07-14
Posts 723 |
CARLY for president!!!!!!!!!! |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
That's what I'm talkin bout.  There are pleasures in poetic pains that only poets know......~Unknown |
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Spine Grinder Senior Member
since 2000-10-28
Posts 1127Standing In Silence... |
this poem rocked!it brought tears to my eyes *S*staci |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
This was absolutely amazing!!! So sad tho...very impressive!! keep up the good work =o) |
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lonely*soul Member
since 2001-04-05
Posts 396east haddam (moodus) ct :) |
wow carly that is an awsome poem..i think its your best yet!!! brought tears to my eyes...for real!!!! poor lil james  <3 *~KiM~* " im surrounded by people, but yet im still all alone" |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
Carly, This piece was truly brilliant and deserves so many more words than the English language will allow. What you have described has provoked a great amount of sadness in me. To be honest, I have never read a piece that has moved me this much. Thankyou for such an amazing read. ~AF~ " Your mother's in here with us Karras. Would you like to leave a message? I'll see that she gets it." |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
It might help if the library button is actually clicked next time. ~AF~ " Your mother's in here with us Karras. Would you like to leave a message? I'll see that she gets it." |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
Holy....haha this was too amazing to even say. Its going in my library...so sad. Regina a small cut is only the beggining of a life in pain |
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Marshalzu
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
Wow... OMG... absoloutely amazing... wonderful... I could go on... but mere words cannot express how much I liked this... Well done. I shall be adding it to my Library. <<_Andrew_>> " No Army can conquer a galaxy, yet faith alone can overturn the universe." |
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Morouxshi San Member
since 2000-10-11
Posts 207San Juan, Puerto Rico |
theyve said it all carly. lovely poem. San, the wise |
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Low Man's Lyric Member
since 2001-04-03
Posts 236In a dream |
Since what im going to say has been said I'll say it again, WOW THIS POEM WAS GREAT!! Give her two red roses, each with a note. The first note says "For the woman I love" and the second, "For my best friend." |
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banburycross Senior Member
since 2001-03-27
Posts 946viginia |
*shivers* i'm at a loss for words, this is truly beautiful writing. definetly one for my library, keep writing beautiful poetry. Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing. |
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banburycross Senior Member
since 2001-03-27
Posts 946viginia |
see by add this to my library, i meant i was going to add this to my library. oopsies. Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing. |
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keoni Senior Member
since 2000-10-16
Posts 850Up in the mountains in the NFC |
Wow! Really amazing. I don't know what else to say, besides you've heard it all already. It's going in my library right now! Jon "Your anger is a gift"-Rage Against The Machine |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
is this gonna be another... "i don't wanna say goodbye" post ???  |
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Heavens Tears
since 2001-03-15
Posts 677 |
OMG! This was truly excellent. It really hit home. I loved your repeating verses. *If the only place I can live my dreams is in my sleep, then I'll sleep forever!* |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
We haven't been talking about tuna, so I hope not...Thanks for the replies guys n' gals, means the world to me. I love you all!!!~Carly There are pleasures in poetic pains that only poets know......~Unknown |
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branden726
since 2000-09-25
Posts 607Bay City, MI |
*Tears of love* *Tears of faith* *Never any Tears of hate* This is awsome i love it and if there was any....Any kind of like hall of fame...this would be #1 in it GREAT JOB "i just love when you bring your whole crew because its just a bigger piece of cake for me to chew threw" |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
ey!!! u knoe wat.. i decided to make this another"i dont wanna say goodbye" post whos down? |
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