Teen Poetry #4 |
She's Gone! |
dreamy_eyes Member
since 2000-06-17
Posts 67 |
She's Gone - modified Things for us werent going to well, I tried to catch her but she fell, I thought that she was happy and fine, I wanted to hold her until she was mine, the world I wanted to protect her from, I loved her so much and now shes gone, their are so many things which I dont understand, like the suicuide note clenched tightly in her hand, she explained how she thought she'd made my life hell, my feeling I showed but never did tell, I loved her so much and I think she loved me, Isnt that the way feelings things should be?, when I was with her I felt so alive, I would have died so she could survive, I like to believe she is with me always, for as long as I live, for the rest of my days. |
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keoni Senior Member
since 2000-10-16
Posts 850Up in the mountains in the NFC |
Nice poem, I'm sorry to hear that such a painful thing happened to you. But I think you are right, she will always be with you, watching over you. Jon "Your anger is a gift"-Rage Against The Machine |
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dreamy_eyes Member
since 2000-06-17
Posts 67 |
Thanks Jon, I believe she is! Luv Debi xXx |
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banburycross Senior Member
since 2001-03-27
Posts 946viginia |
this was really sad, it brings back too many memories for me. i'm sorry that you lost someone that was close to you, and i'm sure she is. Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing. |
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Linc
since 2001-03-07
Posts 552The Backstreet Boy |
Hey, This is so sad, (no joke) I was about to cry reading it. This is one for my library. And if there is a "Heaven" I know she is there and watching over you Until your next poem -- Linc "Once you reach your original goal it seems that the journey was your real accomplishment." |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I liked this. Very good poem! I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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dreamy_eyes Member
since 2000-06-17
Posts 67 |
Yes I no it's sad, but I meant everything I said in the poem. I loved her, but I've moved on but she will always have a place in my heart forever. Luv Debi xXx |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
This is so sad. I'm sorry that things are hard right now. I hope things only get better. As for the poem, it's very well written, and powerful. Nice job. --Marie subconsciously, i think i can eat so much to make my stomach hurt, instead of my heart. |
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