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Lost Part of me!
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Lost Part of me! |
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dreamy_eyes Member
since 2000-06-17
Posts 67 |
LOST PART OF ME! Pregnant at 14 how bad is that, 2months gone by getting fat, the bump i'm hiding, not letting it show, but there's a beautiful baby trying to grow. It's screwed my head up, cant concentrate, another 10 years couldnt it wait, this isnt how i want to live my life, full of nappies, full of strife. I cant even look after me, I wish the baby could see, that i am doing the best for itself, that I cant provide, I have no wealth. To the clinic I must go, I dont want to I hope it knows, I wish there was another way, I'd have this beatiful baby today. When I shut my eyes at night, my dream are just full of fright, I wish I hadn't done it so, and my life wouldnt be full of woe. Luv Debi xXx  [This message has been edited by Debbie Drugs (edited 04-12-2001).] |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
This is pretty heavy stuff......the last word.....if yer tryin to say WOE as in....sorrow .....then it's spelled Woe....not Whoa.... Anyway.....I felt like the flow broke off in certain areas, but besides that the poem was very well done. Quite powerful! Geesh, I really hope this isn't your situation. I hope things are ok....  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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dreamy_eyes Member
since 2000-06-17
Posts 67 |
Thank you for your comment. Is there anyway I can change the spelling error?!?!?! Luv Debi xXx |
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banburycross Senior Member
since 2001-03-27
Posts 946viginia |
To change the error, go up to the edit icon at the top of the poem (next to the email one). as far as the poem goes... this was a really powerful piece and i hope this isn't the situation you're in. keep posting your work. Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing. |
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Linc
since 2001-03-07
Posts 552The Backstreet Boy |
Hey, Congratulations, your poem is great lots of feelings. Keep it up -- Linc "Once you reach your original goal it seems that the journey was your real accomplishment." |
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TrueLUV Member
since 2000-07-19
Posts 158Connecticut, U.S.A. |
This poem was great Iam adding this to my library because I keep it real the way you do. I am an 18 yr old male and I was going to have my first born at 14 aswell but the girl made a very dumb decision... Thanks for sharing and believe me it will be ok |
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dreamy_eyes Member
since 2000-06-17
Posts 67 |
Sorry to hear that TrueLuv but things get better. Thanks for your comment, email me anytime. devillish_deb@hotmail.com Luv Debi xXx |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Soooo yer gonna get an abortion? Nice poem, btw. NOTE TO SELF: Live to love and love to live. |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
I hope you do make the right choices. This is defenitely a difficult circumstance, and I do hope you do consult with adults on this subject matter. I too do hope that you are not hiding this from your parents. Best of luck, and I pray to the Lord to see you thru this. "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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dreamy_eyes Member
since 2000-06-17
Posts 67 |
It's already been done! |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Wow, Debbie. This is a very good poem.. powerful. It's dealing with a very heavy situation. Nicely done. --Marie subconsciously, i think i can eat so much to make my stomach hurt, instead of my heart. |
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