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LoneWolf Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 384IL 
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“Virtues” Fires of passion The keys to our souls The enities of human kind The virtues of all Loyalty Is first and formost among all things The desire to truly live and give for all living things To sacrifice your all for somone other then yourself It is all that we need to do Courage Is next for from loyalty it leads It calls our spirit forth to do great deeds With this in your heart youi know that you shall not fail For in courage we find our true stengths is not frail Right Action Is the one that comes third But it does not lessen the message which is heard Its burdon is not light, though the path it treads is high All will be fine if this is what always comes to mind Justice Is to see all things, for it is blind Knowing no compassion just the truth to find Sending forth life and death upon a whim This virtue must be look carfully upon whithin Honor The invisable token The knights love spoken In this one life shall be undone for frivolrouse things Better to be humble with honor then be offensive me thinks Wisdom The strength of the mind Through this we shall find Many story and many a tear Those who live and died because their minds were sheer. Benevolence Kindness in being Is what all should be achieving No one is complete without this one act Charity is goodness true to the pact Truth Honest is speaking and actions as well Are heart of it all as we seek it through heaven and hell This one will tie it all together Showing we bare it all through any kind of weather Winds of time The death of us all But in the end these shall remain The virtues of all It's too bad I'm not as wonderful a person as people say I am, because the world could use a few people like that. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
This was very interesting! I liked it....i liked how you summed it all up with the winds of time. Very well done.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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banburycross Senior Member
since 2001-03-27
Posts 946viginia |
The format of this was very well done and the ending was excellent. good job on this, keep posting your work. Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing. |
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Linc
since 2001-03-07
Posts 552The Backstreet Boy |
Hey, Great style, I liked this poem. It kinda sounds like a law or something J keep it up and until your next poem -- Linc "Once you reach your original goal it seems that the journey was your real accomplishment." |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
The last line was almost a senryu.... it would be if you remove the word "but." Don't do this if you don't want to, but I think "winds of time" would make a great stand-alone senryu to remember this poem by.  ~Allan Concieted?? Impossible! That would be a fault! |
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LoneWolf Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 384IL |
Hey, first off i would like to thank all of you for replying to this. and Allan i was gonna remove a coupleof words from this and the "but" at the end was one of them. i just didnt' get around to it at one in the morning. and could you please tell me what a senryu is? and what do to with it once i have it? thanks again all you. It's too bad I'm not as wonderful a person as people say I am, because the world could use a few people like that. |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
I really liked the format on this one. This is a very well written piece... I can't wait to read more. --Marie subconsciously, i think i can eat so much to make my stomach hurt, instead of my heart. |
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