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March 1, 1985 (Allan's Challenge)
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March 1, 1985 (Allan's Challenge) |
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LoveBug
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since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697
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I really hate to sound like I'm whining or anything with this one, but this is the only thing that came to mind when I sat down to write this. I hope you enjoy it. Thanks for reading. My father’s first child Joy turned to disappointment A girl, not a boy "Where there is great love there are always miracles" -Cather "Love heals everything, and love is all there is"- Zukav |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
awww... Your not a disappointment!! I cant believe thats what he thinks. Nice senryu, I loved it! ~JDR "Most people are other people. Their thoughts are someone else's opinions, their lives a mimicry, their passions a quotation." -Oscar Wilde |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Hmm... I expected to see this at least once. Nicely written, although somewhat upsetting. You are not a disappointment. I'm sure that you make your father proud, whether he says so or not. Eternal life without the darkness isn't life at all- it is a lobotomy. |
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keoni Senior Member
since 2000-10-16
Posts 850Up in the mountains in the NFC |
Nice Senryu.I'm sure you're not a disappointment.Look on the bright side, at least you're probably not like me, a disappointment and my parents wanted a boy! Just Joking Jon "Your anger is a gift"-Rage Against The Machine |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Challenge met and exceeded Erica ... this is so touching. You're a wonderful person, and I'd be proud to have you as a daughter!  Best wishes, /Kit PS ... check your e-mail for a note, OK? [This message has been edited by Kit McCallum (edited 01-11-2001).] |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Awwww....it's ok. Nice one here though.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Oh my, I wasn't expecting to read one like this, but good job on it. It really conveys the feelings well, even though it's short. "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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Melster Member
since 2000-12-09
Posts 442Brisbane, Qld, Australia |
Good Job, don't know what else to say... we are all a disappointment to our parents at some stage in our lives... you just got yours out of the way early!! Melz!! You can't hurt me anymore than I have hurt myself already... |
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LoveBug
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Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
Thank you all for your heart-warming replies. They have really made my day! Love ya! "Where there is great love there are always miracles" -Cather "Love heals everything, and love is all there is"- Zukav |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
now why would say such a thing not all guys want their first born to be boys you know I'd prefer to have a girl first  and that's not a joke i think girl become more responsible earlier adn would take care of their sibling better than boys at least that's my opinion great job with the poem though really caught my attention I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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Baby Gansta Junior Member
since 2000-12-09
Posts 24 |
How can a person who is as talented as you be a disappointment to anyone? If anyone is stupid enough to think you're a disappointment...don't worry, it's their loss for not taking time to get to know a person as wonderful as you! I was beautifully written, if somewhat sad. |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
Awww... this was good. I understand what you are saying, originally maybe your father wanted a boy.... most dad's do. But I'm sure you make him proud. xoxo Jenn "A person can never get over a broken heart if they aren't willing to let go of all of the pieces."-- ?? |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
LoveBug, im glad that you have found in within yourself to write haiku...and no, you are not whining.... funny though, i am a boy and im sure i disappointed my mother who rather wanted a girl..LOL |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
Believe me, you are no disappontment... |
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White Wolf Member
since 1999-09-18
Posts 371Somewhere in the vast wasteland |
Hey I was a disappiontment early in my life too. My mom wanted a redhead. I have brown hair. But I am now one because I am not where my parents think I should be in life. To disappoint is part of life, as far as I have seen, but one should never feel that from one's parents. I feel for you. As a poet, your class is far above mine. I couldn't hope to write something like that. Greatly written(if that can be a phrase). The White Wolf PS Maybe I should of said wonderfully written but I like to be a little bit different. |
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