Teen Poetry #4 |
My Dream Boy |
Secsyy lil angel Junior Member
since 2000-05-30
Posts 36Portland Oregon, USA |
The stars above are shining Like diamonds in the heavenly sky Below I rest as I stare up above Dreaming of the boy I could call my love I close my eyes and I can see him His dark eyes staring right through mine I look at him, such a handsom face On which kisses i could gently place A warm feeling runs through me As I imagine him taking my hand Gently leading me into his arms Keeping me safe, never to be harmed I dream of the nights he would call me Spending hours on the phone Talking about useless things Yet to me such happiness it brings Sometimes I wonder if he's even out there Thinking of me like I do of him I hope one day destiny will prove true And I will be able to find you My dream boy ~*Love exists only in the hearts of those who choose to acknowledge its existence...*~ *~To the world you may be one person, but to one person you may be the world.~* |
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keoni Senior Member
since 2000-10-16
Posts 850Up in the mountains in the NFC |
Nice poem. I know how you're feeling.( except for the boy part) He's out there, you just have to find him. Good luck and keep writing. Jon "Your anger is a gift"-Rage Against The Machine |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
I must say that I love the last stanza, and ending line. This is very creative, very well thought-out. Well done. Aside from that I'll say you had a good scheme of rhyme. ~Allan The sun was born, so it shall die. ~VNV Nation, "Further" |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
simple wrods make an awesome poem i love it i love it i love it Just wait girl, he'll come around "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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Low Man's Lyric Member
since 2001-04-03
Posts 236In a dream |
I liked your poem, it was great. I can relate to how you're feeling (except im waiting for a girl!). "Eat, drink and be merry for tomorrow you die" |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Very nice job on this one. This is very sweet. Good luck on finding him.. I'm sure you will Very nicely written. --Marie "Hope is a thing with feathers that perches in the soul." --Emily Dickinson |
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banburycross Senior Member
since 2001-03-27
Posts 946viginia |
This was written in a simple form but was very sweet and easy to relate to. i liked this a lot and i hope you find him eventually. Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing. |
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JBaker515
since 2001-02-28
Posts 458Dartmouth College |
Angel, i liked this alot.. Hi, I am Jeff..I love LOVE poems, if you will, and this one was great. It had a great rythme scheme, worked well. He will come, i found mine, and there was a point when i wondered the same thing, but trust me, he will come. Believe in yourself. Dont just go searching for love, it will find you thats my advice, keep posting, hope to see more from ya Jeff |
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cherish Senior Member
since 2001-03-25
Posts 1639swimming in fairy floss........... |
aaaaaaaaaaawwwwwwwwww..thats such a sweet poem.. i guess we're all dreaming of a guy like that...good job! |
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Heavens Tears
since 2001-03-15
Posts 677 |
I love it! But trust me, very few have found the perfect guy, so join the club! J/K! *If the only place I can live my dreams is in my sleep, then I'll sleep forever!* |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
i'm with everyone else I loved it..great job. keep posting *dq ¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤ |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
dream boys are very sexy and super amazing ppl. (i know for a fact) we all have a dream boy or girl we just have to find them.....and you will! Regina PS amazing work! a small cut is only the beggining of a life in pain |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
------> Dream guy <------ Very well done. I liked the poem. I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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