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Marshalzu

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since 2001-02-15

Posts 2681
Lurking

0 posted 2001-04-10 04:50 PM

Fire Engine.

Your blue flashing lights,
A wailing siren,
You race through the night,
With your fire men,
A red engined glory,
Fighting off the fire,
A fire engine story,
If I might enquire,
Racing through red lights,
To seek out the blaze,
On cold winter nights,
And warm summer days,
A fire engine beauty,
The bells ring a call,
So your off on your duty,
When I finally fall.

<<< Andrew >>>

" No Army can conquer a galaxy, yet faith alone can overturn the universe."

Allan Riverwood

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since 2001-01-04

Posts 3502
Winnipeg

1 posted 2001-04-10 06:22 PM

Ah! This poem is good... very good... because of the last line! It got my brain working over.... and me reading the poem several times.

This is tough to do, great job!
~Allan

The sun was born, so it shall die. ~VNV Nation, "Further"

Fading Away

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since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

2 posted 2001-04-10 08:18 PM

Nice job, Andrew!
I really like this.. the flow was great, and the ending was excellent.
Nicely done.

--Marie

"Hope is a thing with feathers that perches in the soul." --Emily Dickinson

banburycross
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since 2001-03-27

Posts 946
viginia

3 posted 2001-04-11 09:44 AM

I liked this poem, the ending to it is really excelent. i thought the flow at the begining could use a little work, but other than that this was great. keep posting your work.

Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing.

Heavens Tears

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since 2001-03-15

Posts 677

4 posted 2001-04-11 09:49 AM

Great poem. Very good rhyme. I agree with Marie about the flow of it. Very nice.

*If the only place I can live my dreams is in my sleep, then I'll sleep forever!*

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

5 posted 2001-04-11 06:38 PM

Great! This poem was astounding! I felt as though the deep meaning within such a plain topic such as the fire engine was great. I really enjoyed this.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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