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chas Member
since 2001-04-08
Posts 101Lynn, ma |
this is to all the young dads who at first didn't know what they are getting into, but later on in life found out what they have to do. this poem don't relate to me, but i will use it as a reminder of what not to do. All my life, all my joy, All my wonders for my baby boy, Where is he? I'm not sure, But I'll be sure I'll let her know, I'll find him soon, to hold him again, To try to be his greatest friend, All my torments, all my sins, I'll try to fix them if she let me mend them, From the start, it's my entire fault, I should've of loved you with all my heart, It's a shame, I didn't know, I lost control and let you both go, All my memories, all my dreams, Those things cannot exist without you both here, I miss you, and I miss our son, I wish I could hold either one of you, I'm a fool, why can't I learn, I cannot have what I did not earn, So I will try, until I understand, How to be a father and be your man |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Wow.. 0 posts on page 3? I can't believe that.. this poem was very well written. Some of the rhymes didn't match up exactly, and that could be something you might want to try and go back over, but other than that this was a nice poem. Thanks for sharing.. keep posting. --Marie "Hope is a thing with feathers that perches in the soul." --Emily Dickinson |
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JBaker515
since 2001-02-28
Posts 458Dartmouth College |
NIce poem here chas, whats your real name anyway?? Keep posting, sening this one back to page one~~ JEff |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
This was quite enlightening. A very different perspective here. I hope none of us become young fathers....good poem  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Yeah, unless we want to anyway, Dopes... I did enjoy this one. Nice job.  ~Allan The sun was born, so it shall die. ~VNV Nation, "Further" |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
yup no young fathers here or is there? anyways very different but interesting as well keep writing |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
i really liked this one.....so i thought to ring it back.....being a young father must e hard, as being a young mother would be. Regina a small cut is only the beggining of a life in pain |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
I like your thoughts on this one It's never too late thanks for sharing loved it "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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