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Angel Bee
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since 2001-01-30

Posts 176
Virginia

0 posted 2001-04-07 10:06 PM

Hey You

hey you,
how are you today
you are well, i pray
i hope everything has gone as you wish
i'm waiting for you and your sweet kiss

hey you,
i want to say im sorry for me
i really like you, im just afraid, you see
what if i let another too close
and then you leave, and i hurt the most

hey you,
i know sometimes i ignore you
and pass you by too
but im so scared
if something happens i won't be prepared

hey you,
please forgive me, i like you so much
i'll try to do better and such
so i'll finish this letter with one last thought
you've won me over, i was bought

hey you,
thanks for sticking with me
and thanks for what you've made me see
hopefully we'll go a long long way
cause i won't leave, im here to stay

AngelShell
Member

since 2000-03-01

Posts 446
not heaven nor hell so...

1 posted 2001-04-07 11:26 PM

Hey Angel Bee, this was really great. I liked the way you started each stanza with "hey you" that really gave it a nice feel.
You write well.

anonymous albert ?

Member Elite

since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

2 posted 2001-04-07 11:28 PM

yup!
for sure nice job

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

3 posted 2001-04-08 02:38 AM

Yea I liked how you started each stanza with Hey You aswell. I liked the poem.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Linc

Senior Member

since 2001-03-07

Posts 552
The Backstreet Boy

4 posted 2001-04-08 09:40 AM

Hey,

This is great, its a kool poem its going in my library. Until your next poem

-- Linc

"Once you reach your original goal it seems that the journey was your real accomplishment."

banburycross
Senior Member

since 2001-03-27

Posts 946
viginia

5 posted 2001-04-09 12:42 PM

this poem reminded me of that rock song where all the verses star t out with hey you and now i've got that song stuck in my head. anyway, good job on this poem, keep posting

Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing.

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

6 posted 2001-04-11 11:30 PM

hey you
you wrote a really good poem you see
i hope you share more
hey you
thanks for the beautiful read

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

dreamer1 12 5 24
Member

since 2000-12-11

Posts 150
crossing between

7 posted 2001-04-12 12:01 PM

Hi!
I really liked this poem! Good job! I liked the "hey you" too.

dreamer

....peace as a primary objective is dangerous because it implies that we would sacrifice any principle for the sake of it....
Robert Kaplan

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