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Empty tears
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since 2001-03-12

Posts 64

0 posted 2001-04-07 05:24 PM

Wanting to scream
Holding it in
they wouldn't understand anyway
Wanting to Cry
Holding Back the tears
I cant tell them whats wrong.
Wanting to die
Staying alive
they would think it was selfish.
Wanting to tell them
Knowing I cant
they could never understand my pain.
Wanting to break down
Being strong for them
I cant be another problem.
Wanting to scream
Holding it in
I cant tell them whats wrong.
Wanting to Cry
Holding Back the tears
they wouldn't understand anyway.
Because they dont know me

Ina
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since 2000-10-09

Posts 1236
Quebec, Canada

1 posted 2001-04-07 05:27 PM

these was awesome. great work.

regina

a small cut is only the beggining of a life in pain

Allan Riverwood

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since 2001-01-04

Posts 3502
Winnipeg

2 posted 2001-04-07 05:42 PM

Good job! I love the form you used.

Hope to see more!
~Allan

The sun was born, so it shall die. ~VNV Nation, "Further"

HappyPretender
Junior Member

since 2001-03-06

Posts 38
Prince George, VA

3 posted 2001-04-07 08:17 PM

Very good poem! I'm sure a lot of people can really relate, but isn't it funny how all of us may feel the same thing but we all can'nt get it out? Believe or not, other people out there do know what it feels like and you're not so alone, just remember that. Keep writing.

<3~*Rachael*~<3
*we can't become what we need to be by remaining what we are*

Fading Away

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since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

4 posted 2001-04-07 10:24 PM

This is a very nicely written poem. Good job..

--Marie

"Hope is a thing with feathers that perches in the soul." --Emily Dickinson

anonymous albert ?

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since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

5 posted 2001-04-07 10:40 PM

nicely written and well discribed i liked it as a way i can relate to. keep writin

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

6 posted 2001-04-08 02:32 AM

I know exactly how this feels. Very well done. You described the feeling perfectly. Hope things get better for you!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Linc

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since 2001-03-07

Posts 552
The Backstreet Boy

7 posted 2001-04-08 09:43 AM

Hey,

Yet another great poem

keep it up and until your next

-- Linc

"Once you reach your original goal it seems that the journey was your real accomplishment."

banburycross
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since 2001-03-27

Posts 946
viginia

8 posted 2001-04-09 12:45 PM

Another good poem, i always enjoy reading your work. good job and keep posting

Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing.

Silver Butterfly
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since 2001-03-13

Posts 42
Between here and the end

9 posted 2001-04-23 06:11 PM

This shows a lot of emotion without a bunch of cluttered imagry. The contradictions in what you do and what you want to do help it a lot. The lines that stuck with me were:
"Wanting to break down
Being strong for them"
Again, good job!

MindlessPoet
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since 2001-04-20

Posts 106
Texas

10 posted 2001-04-23 06:36 PM

I really liked this one, I think this is my fav out of what I've read from you. Keep it up!

*TiMMYBoY*
Yeah, that's me. The Weird One.

anonymous albert ?

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since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

11 posted 2001-04-23 07:14 PM

sorry i forgot i replyed to this poem already
..hehe..but as i said this poem was truly nicely written. great job!..hehe.. i be trippen again..hehehe...........byee

...?

death is not the greatest loss in life. the greatest loss is what dies inside us while we live. -norman cousins

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AngelPoet87
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since 2001-04-21

Posts 280
Indy

12 posted 2001-04-23 08:03 PM

Really good poem, I enjoyed reading it, maybe b/c I can relate so well. Great job!

2Good
+2Be
------
4Gotten

IsGona
Senior Member

since 2000-07-14

Posts 723

13 posted 2001-04-23 08:36 PM

Wow I'm really digging the format here. Such a sad poem, truely enjoyed.
Jason

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

14 posted 2001-04-28 12:09 PM

This is sad. I hope one day you can voice your true self out. Thanks for sharing

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

sweetstuff101
Member

since 2000-07-27

Posts 375
OK, USA

15 posted 2001-04-28 12:20 PM

aaaaaaww that was really good!!! I totally get where ur coming from!! That was really well written, keep up the awesome work!!

Much Luv,
~*~SweetStuff~*~

SuMdAy U'll CrY 4 mE bUt I wOn'T cRy 4 U, sUmDaY U'll MiSs Me LiKe I MiSsD U, SuMdAy Ull nEeD mE LiKe I nEeDed U, sUmDaY U'll lUv Me BuT I wOn'T LuV U

kaile

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since 2000-02-06

Posts 5146
singapore

16 posted 2001-04-28 12:11 PM

enjooyed the repetition scheme..that must have been hard to do

xShUgArHiGhx

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since 2000-09-26

Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

17 posted 2001-04-29 07:51 PM

Omggg you have no idea how badly i want to like pass out a copy of this poem to each one of my friends because this is exactly how i feel!! Of course i wont do that but you really hit home for me with this poem...AMAZING job!

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