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princess^sarah Member
since 2001-01-12
Posts 131melbourne 
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Come to my Sabbath, an old woman calls, before its too late. The Sabbath is dark, and held at midnight, and all is on fire, and majic os performed. Witches and warlocks, come from around, for this special night, once a year. Leave from the Sabbath, a young girl cries, before it's too late, or your bound to die. i hope no-one takes any sorta offense to this.. |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
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princess^sarah Member
since 2001-01-12
Posts 131melbourne |
?????????????????? whats the ? for |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
^ What is that all about? Good job, Sarah. I liked this.. Keep sharing. --Marie It's true that we don't know what we've got until we lose it, but it's also true that we don't know what we've been missing until it arrives. |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
hahahaha i was jus messin wit u it meant i liked the poem well in a way anyways keep writin...it was different but nice and sorry if i offended u. i be trippen like that at times pplz understand me hehe [This message has been edited by anonymous albert ? (edited 04-07-2001).] |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Besides some spelling errors in the second stanza, I thought you did rather well with this one. Not your best, but nonetheless a good read.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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AngelShell Member
since 2000-03-01
Posts 446not heaven nor hell so... |
I liked it, is there any kinda "Supernatural forum"? There should be. |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Yes, I'll agree with Shell... although this may even fit in Spiritual. Don't mind Albert, Sarah... he's a wierdo, we're all learning to love him though.  Oh and don't mind Dopey... he is very honest, the fact that he's comfortable telling you what is and isn't your best shows that he respects your talent greatly. Don't mind me..... I'm just replying.  ~Allan The sun was born, so it shall die. ~VNV Nation, "Further" |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
The sabbath...is a jewish term used to describe the day of resting. I dont understand at all where this fits. Im sorry...but im jewish. I really dont think sabbath was the right word to use for this poem. The sabbath is a day of rest and joy. please dont take offense to this reply...but im quite intersted in way you used a holy day in this poem. please email me ([email protected]) Regina a small cut is only the beggining of a life in pain |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
no ina, i think poetry is like the way escapin from life the freedom to write and must religion take away that freedom? poetry is expression and i wish it stays that way no rules in poetry only freedom of expression from the mind.... i too have belief in my heart but i don't let that interfere wit my poetry. [This message has been edited by anonymous albert ? (edited 04-07-2001).] |
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