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Marshalzu

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since 2001-02-15

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0 posted 2001-04-04 04:46 PM

Space Mission.

Catapulted, Slingshot,
Far into space,
Government denials,
They try to save their face,
Mission aborted,
Never did exist,
Rumours are reported,
As the families resist,
Brainwashing television,
A government cover up,
Who made up this decision,
They must have been corrupt,
A suspicious ending,
To silence all the news,
Of a failed space mission,
And the death of both their crews.

Do I know something that you don't? I don't think so... I think I just had a very weird dream.
Andrew.

" No Army can conquer a galaxy, yet faith alone can overturn the universe."

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since 2000-09-14

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1 posted 2001-04-04 06:06 PM

this is wicked cool! LOL might want to watch the syllable use cuz u start out with a scheme but hey what the hell(o) it's your poem right? LOL nice job

Valerie

*Life can take your dreams and turn them upside down, Friends will talk about you when you're not around, but don't ever lose that light in your eyes*

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

2 posted 2001-04-04 06:09 PM

Or maybe you had a dream about something you know that we don't.....who knows.

I liked this one. Very ogirinal.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Fading Away

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since 2001-03-14

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Lynchburg, Virginia

3 posted 2001-04-04 07:56 PM

Woohoo! Very nice job! This is interesting.. very unique and a pleasure to read. Keep posting.

--Marie

It's true that we don't know what we've got until we lose it, but it's also true that we don't know what we've been missing until it arrives.

Allan Riverwood

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since 2001-01-04

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Winnipeg

4 posted 2001-04-05 06:40 PM

Must have been a fun dream.

It certainly was an entertaining and unique poem.
Nice job.
~Allan

The sun was born, so it shall die. ~VNV Nation, "Further"

Marshalzu

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since 2001-02-15

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5 posted 2001-04-07 07:20 AM

Thanks for the great critiques guys, Its always a great pleasure to post on passions. And it was an absoloutly weird dream.
Andrew.

" No Army can conquer a galaxy, yet faith alone can overturn the universe."

Lakewalker
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On the streets w/ people

6 posted 2001-04-07 05:34 PM

Hey, nice job on this poem! Governments are probably always covering things up. Maybe we have to dream things to find out the truth? hmmmmmm...........

"Be kind, for everyone you meet is fighting a hard battle"
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Child of the Stars

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since 2000-09-07

Posts 1658
Ann Arbor, MI

7 posted 2001-04-07 09:41 PM

Yep, syllable count was iffy, but the rest was magnificent! Hehehe......insane dreams rock.
~Carly

NOTE TO SELF: Live to love and love to live.

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