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Dark Enchantress
Senior Member

since 1999-07-27

Posts 1258
meet Morgana

0 posted 2001-04-05 03:20 PM

Roller coaster
Devil's peak
Sweet release
I tried to breathe
but the past choked me
Choked me for too long
Dwelled on the anger
that never stopped burning
That twisted my insides
and poisoned my heart
Full of hate
and demanding violence
Nothing could hurt me
because I was pain itself
That's what happens to you
when you're full of rage
It becomes the scavenger
of your soul -
picking at it and eating it
Decomposing dreams
and turning hope to dust

But no more
I've paid more than enough
attention to the past
It's time to start walking
forward

Oke, so it sucks. *shrugs* You shouldn't be surprised by now.

I don't know. I just felt like spillin' out something.

I had a dream once that I could fly and I laughed at everyone and kicked them in the back of the head because they couldn't fly too.

[This message has been edited by Dark Enchantress (edited 04-05-2001).]

banburycross
Senior Member

since 2001-03-27

Posts 946
viginia

1 posted 2001-04-05 03:41 PM

i disagree whole heartedly with the last lines that you wrote. it doesn't suck and i WOULD be surprised if someone talented like you wrote a poem that did. i love the emotion in this piece and it was a pleasure to have a glimpse of some of your personal thoughts. thank you and keep posting

Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing.

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

2 posted 2001-04-05 07:23 PM

Nice.....I felt this was an exceptional poem. I felt the purity of the feelings within this one. So real....very powerful.
I enjoyed it.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Linc

Senior Member

since 2001-03-07

Posts 552
The Backstreet Boy

3 posted 2001-04-05 07:32 PM

Hey,

I also though it was great. What they all said was what I was going to say. Until your next poem

-- Linc

"Once you reach your original goal it seems that the journey was your real accomplishment."

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

4 posted 2001-05-02 05:39 PM

This is a really strong way of expressing your emotions. ~*applauds*~ keep writing

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

anonymous albert ?

Member Elite

since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

5 posted 2001-05-02 06:22 PM

i really liked the emotions in this one..
also the message wa great..thanks for sharing and keep writing

...?

if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry"

Terryloveiris_85
Member

since 2001-04-23

Posts 61
The middle of nowhere

6 posted 2001-05-02 06:30 PM

I really enjoyed this poem. It's goin' in my library!

~IRIS

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