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starryeyed999 Junior Member
since 2001-03-05
Posts 35 |
I never thought that you would ever be the one to let me down. I guess that just goes to show how wrong I always am. I never wanted it to end like this. I always wanted to have your kiss. I never thought that you would leave. I just wanted you here always and forever. My mind will never let you go. Our gentle wind will always blow. You will never leave my heart or soul. You will always remain the one I shall love. Always. xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx I tried to have every other line always and everyother line never! tell me if you liked it! And what worked and what didn't ;o) <*Lacy*> |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Nicely done. i thought it worked out just fine. Very nice.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
i liked throughout the way it was written but the end line how it ended seemed as little ackward but the rest was jus fine keep writin  |
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Elvenblood Member
since 2001-02-17
Posts 409Maine, USA |
Oh, this is ovely! I love that! Thanks for writing it! No angels in heaven nor demons below the sea, could ever dissever my soul from the soul of the beautiful Annabel Lee |
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banburycross Senior Member
since 2001-03-27
Posts 946viginia |
This was a beautiful piece, really something that was a pleasure to read. keep writing and posting. Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing. |
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Linc
since 2001-03-07
Posts 552The Backstreet Boy |
Hey, I agree with them its a great poem keep it up hope to see mor like it -- Linc "Once you reach your original goal it seems that the journey was your real accomplishment." |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Good write my friend. Such a straight and honest penning of your feelings. Good job "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Very cute, emotional... just overall another sweet poem. ~Allan The sun was born, so it shall die. ~VNV Nation, "Further" |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
i keep postin twice on the same poems pplz understand hehe [This message has been edited by anonymous albert ? (edited 04-10-2001).] |
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fractal007 Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958 |
A good poem. I thought the repetition was a good touch here. "If history is to change, let it change. If the world is to be destroyed, so be it. If my fate is to die, I must simply laugh" |
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