Teen Poetry #4 |
Somewhere With You |
HappyPretender Junior Member
since 2001-03-06
Posts 38Prince George, VA |
Somewhere over the rainbow Lies a land where dreams come true Not very often found But by dreamers made believers This land I have seen Just with you Filling every wish Making them come true Lost over that rainbow Somewhere with you. |
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LoveBug
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Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
Beautiful description of the wonderful things that you have discovered through this person. Short but sweet. Thanks for sharing. "Men judge generally more by the eye than by the hand, for everyone can see and few can feel."-Machiavelli |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
This is pretty short, but the length of the poem was perfect with the simplicity. Beautiful poem. Nice job. --Marie It's true that we don't know what we've got until we lose it, but it's also true that we don't know what we've been missing until it arrives. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Very sweet. I liked this very much. It really hit home with me. I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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silvrduck Member
since 2000-11-05
Posts 146 |
Like they said, short but sweet! I liked this one a lot... isn't it great to feel that way about someone? *sigh*.... *The hardest thing to do is watch the one you love, love somebody else.* [This message has been edited by silvrduck (edited 04-03-2001).] |
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cherish Senior Member
since 2001-03-25
Posts 1639swimming in fairy floss........... |
cute and very sweet.. ...really very nice!! |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
HappyPretender- Very beautiful write...gave me a calm and peaceful feeling... i really enjoyed reading this.. keep up the great work! ~vicky "...until you have read the verse on his |
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banburycross Senior Member
since 2001-03-27
Posts 946viginia |
How many times can we write short and sweet about the same piece? Great job expressing a lot in a very few words. great writing, keep up the good work. Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing. |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
yea nice job but i think a poems length doesn't seem 2 matter cuz either one long or short as long as the reader gets the true poets emotions a nd thoughts arcossed 2 the heart keep writin though |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Such beautiful words that bring peace from within. great job my friend. thanks for sharing "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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Godsend_1 Member
since 2001-04-19
Posts 247great state of illinois |
i really liked it it was short and sweet and fit perfectly together thank you for a read ben redshaw the great i am what i am and that is all that i am and all that i shall ever be......so deal with it |
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Heavens Tears
since 2001-03-15
Posts 677 |
Great job Rachael. Its really sweet. The Wizard of Oz rocks! *~*Amanda*~* |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
wow, this is wonderful |
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Marshalzu
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
Great Poem. I really loved it.Keep up the good work. Zu " The tree of liberty must be refreshed from time to time with the blood of patriots" -Thomas jefferson |
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Linc
since 2001-03-07
Posts 552The Backstreet Boy |
Hey, VERY nice great infact. I loved it if sung right this will be a great song -- Linc "Once you reach your original goal it seems that the journey was your real accomplishment." |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Very nice! I liked the last few lines, the ending to this one was well done. ~Allan Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life. |
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