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Marshalzu

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since 2001-02-15

Posts 2681
Lurking

0 posted 2001-04-03 04:44 PM

Shattering your world.

I can’t stand this life,
I’m pushing down the pain,
I put away this knife,
Because it’s driving me insane,
I don’t think you deserve this,
It was my big mistake,
I risked it for a kiss,
And now how my heart aches,
Your bitter, biting tongue,
Has pierced my heart again,
Maybe I’m too young,
I just treat love like it’s a game,
I wish I could renew,
You confidence in me,
I know your black and blue,
And your tears would fill a sea,
But you won’t let me speak,
I can’t apologise,
It’s making me weak,
Can’t bear the compromise,
I’m losing my dreams,
Downcast and desolate,
I’m scarred by your screams,
But I must live with your hate.

Andrew.

" No Army can conquer a galaxy, yet faith alone can overturn the universe."

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

1 posted 2001-04-03 10:14 PM

I presume this is about your X that spreads yer poems around trying to make you look like a fool. Keep that head up dude!
I liked this poem. I thought you did quite well in expressing it. Very nice. I think you're a great writer and I look forward to more.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Lakewalker
Member Elite

since 2000-08-05

Posts 3289
On the streets w/ people

2 posted 2001-04-05 04:24 PM

I liked the strong attitude in this one, good job on the poem!

"Be kind, for everyone you meet is fighting a hard battle"
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branden726

Senior Member

since 2000-09-25

Posts 607
Bay City, MI

3 posted 2001-04-05 04:31 PM

Hey who's X spreads there poems around????? HUH? show me her ill beat her up

jk. Hey i know if any of my poems went around school trying to make me look good well my x would just fail cuz i write from the heart and thats all that matters and ive won like 3 poetry contests at school

banburycross
Senior Member

since 2001-03-27

Posts 946
viginia

4 posted 2001-04-05 04:50 PM

This is a really well written poem, the ryhme is good and the feeling is well spoken. Now what's this part about an ex that im missing...?

Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing.

Empty tears
Member

since 2001-03-12

Posts 64

5 posted 2001-04-05 10:31 PM

Good poem,really got your point across...i really liked the way it flowed. Great Job!

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