Teen Poetry #4 |
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Poet on Acid Member
since 2001-01-07
Posts 325Florida, USA |
The fear you have Someone’s faced it The escape you have The devils laced it The powers you think you have Will be taken away Weather it be all at once Or day by day The powers you think you have Are already slipping away You’re not the first You won’t be the last To come to this world And have regrets fill your past You just might get your wish If you try to leave it to fast Survival never touches The mind of the suicidal The life has already left them Their emotions going from tidal To pure fear and pain Wearing them like a thorn filled bridal You’re not the last You’re not the first The want of love Creates a thirst The loss of love Can make one burst A part of your heart Ends up as lost time Using ones emotions Should be a crime But it’s all right They too will die sometime The title doesn't really mean anything, it was just the first word that poped in my head. >¶Øʆ< |
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banburycross Senior Member
since 2001-03-27
Posts 946viginia |
i really liked this poem. the stucture is very cool and the rhyme scheme is good. The want of love Creates a thirst The loss of love Can make one burst Those are my favorite lines from the poem, very beautiful stuff. keep it up Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing. |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
POA, your poems improve with every new post. Im really enjoying reading your work. There was a lot of need in this poem. hope to see more! Regina a small cut is only the beggining of a life in pain |
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Elvenblood Member
since 2001-02-17
Posts 409Maine, USA |
Oh this is such a great piece! lol, intot he library! "Some men see things as they are and say why. |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Amazing post, POA. Another one going into the library. Great job.. again. --Marie It's true that we don't know what we've got until we lose it, but it's also true that we don't know what we've been missing until it arrives. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I thought this was fine, but I have read much better from you. Hope to see more! I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
great job on this keep writin' |
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