Teen Poetry #4 |
Hmm...I'm really not sure |
Elvenblood Member
since 2001-02-17
Posts 409Maine, USA |
The preacher stands elevated from the rest Ringing cries reverberate his suggests Is his ranting evil, or is it blessed Most pressing of all, will he succeed in his quest? Standing at his altar in his church He hits a high point in his speech, people lurch Many are against his people search Including those in thrones of birch He seeks those destined to be his true friends And he’s not manipulating them like a lens He seeks not those he knows he bends But the ones like he, who don’t fall into trends The deity he worships does not glow It does not promise eternal life or all to know Yet there are so few with the courage to show That they are willing to help and make this grow From a box a man steps down Sorrowful of humanity - can’t suppress his frown He goes to his home in the town And watches another man forge a crown “Oh to live in a perfect world!” But to our real leaders: spit is hurled They sit in boxes, cold and curled They watched as their existence swirled Spiraled into a bitter, painful hell “Oh to live in a nutshell! To be oblivious the world fell Not exiled because you rebel!” “You’re better off without them!” You start to condemn But you cannot stand for this stem Because you’ve always shown like a gem “Then why am I here all alone?” A sorrowful soul begins to moan It would be so much easier if this were known But I must sit here on my own Hating humanity, forever tortured by this curse Foresight to the inevitable, and evolution’s reverse Watching the crowd of friends, at the bang, disperse This man rides with no more cares in a hearse "Some men see things as they are and say why. |
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AngelShell Member
since 2000-03-01
Posts 446not heaven nor hell so... |
This was good. Many a time have I tried to write about God and the feelings that radiate around that topic and never have I managed this task. I always become jumbled and confused. This is a good poem with many emotions. |
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Elvenblood Member
since 2001-02-17
Posts 409Maine, USA |
This isn't about religion really. It's about people speacking their piece, some listened to some not. It was apinful and bitter for me, but I'll get over it. I happen to like this work, and I'm surprised at how fast all 3 of these were buried. "Some men see things as they are and say why. |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Well one of them is locked. I'm bringing these up... Good job on this one especially, I really did like the format of it although you'll maim me for saying so. hehe ~Allan The sun was born, so it shall die. ~VNV Nation, "Further" |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
this poem was well writen great job on this keep writing |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
Nice. intersting read. regina a small cut is only the beggining of a life in pain |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I thought this was great. I liked the message and yer little explanation helped a bit. nicely done. I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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